Leangthy, yes, nice idea though. I read it two times before replying. To me it seems choppy, not the flow itself, the flows good. The story is choppy, like the descriptions. Nice vocab and imagery for the most part, if you would have made the story more fluid to make the imagery stand out more I think it would have been 9.5+. Good shit anyways my man, keep droppin. Peace. 7.7 overall.

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