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Old 11-15-06, 05:45 PM   #15
TeamOne
FuxJustAWord
 
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wow... who produced this shit... bass is really bumpin.....

Hook??? at the beginnin..... shit is kinda nice, but ur voice seems too loud for that part of the beat to me... hah, make her splash.... nice... hook is decent but u dont seem to have as much emotion as u do on ur verses

First Verse: beat the puss to applesauce, lmao..... u got some nice lines in this shit... "wipin her mouth" now that shits funny

Second Verse: fucks his hand.... lmao, sat in somethin.... these lyrics are nice but it does seem like u overpower the beat too much, might needa turn the beat up alil bit...

Third Verse: opens up pretty nice... i like this one actually the most then the others, atleast some sort of story to it, but u still inject some nice wordplay/punches.... heard dudes make alotta braggin tracks, but not alot of sex braggin shit....

i dunno if i really like the concept, lmao, shit is raw..... but i dont really wanna hear about how YOU get down.... some shit is funny tho about takin another dudes girl..... deso track, but i heard alot better shit from u
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