Dervla: verse was pretty good, except i dont think it followed the concept of the topic....Structure wasent too off and vocabulary was nice not too overdone, like you said it was done quick, you could have done it better and more key to topic , although i thought it was good.....



Stanza, Your structure fucked me up a little much but it dident seem to hinder your flow much, i also felt you dident put much effort into this ither...
Your a top head on here and you dident come as hard as you normally do...anyway i felt your verse was on topic...in perticular i liked your closer

v/stanza

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