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Old 08-20-04, 11:45 AM   #14
Spektikul
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Opener - Neither were punches
Closer - Images was hard! afro's was self-glorified
Punches - Images threw bombs, afro came weak
Personals - Neither had any
Structure - Images was really neat and clean, afros was a little sloppy and started new sentences in the same line as the ones before
Vocab - definatly image, nothin special in afros
Metas - Both used so many, tie
Multies - Image busted left and right

No hate afro, im just giving my honest opinion. I think you need to elevate Punches, structure, and vocab. You had some alright stuff inyour verse too, dont get me wrong...but I was feelin images a lot more. Image, very well done man, you had really hard punches, great structure and nice multies that flowed well. Only thing I can really say about yours is try using personals as well as hard punches...again, good job....