Tell me what you think of this. It's kinda simple but I thought I would go ahead and post it...Thankz...

You Promised that You would Always be there
That you would never give up, and Always care
You Said that You Would be around
That you would never Let me Down
Now, When I need you the most, You're not here
You told me That you wouldn't make me shed a Tear
Who do You Think You are?
To tell me we are close, Yet, We are so Far
What the Hell do you think you are doing?
Who do you think You are Fooling?
I bought too many of your innocent Lies
For too many nights you have made me cry
Telling me things that werent True
And my Whole damn life, I believed You
I waited for you Every night
Staying awake untill daylight
Sometimes I just Close me eyes and scream out your name
But when I Re-open Them, Your gone, Just the same
Why couldn't you just have stayed?
Now I'm all alone, Feeling Betrayed...

like i always say this piece was tight,it was intresting,good use of words and kinda sad to,keep postin this tight shit baby girl.

Thank you! I enjoy hearing responses from you. Thanks for the feedback!

peAce

Hey, this was another good peice of yours. This one was better, and it was a real great venting peace. It flowed properly with no pauses or breaks, and the content itself really expressed how hurt you felt. Of course... feeling hurt isn't a good thing. But being able to express it is.

~Shalom~

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Originally posted by Bruklor Nec is just dumb

I'm taking that as a compliment.

Thanks for the response. I agree about the hurt..lol. But this is about the only way I know to express my thoughts or feelings. Thankz once again

peAce

Its Alright...Just Make It A Litle Bit More In Depth And It Will Be Straight

Peace.

Thanks for the advice...I appreciate it

peAce

i liked it....i check out all yo shit i like your style...stay up

Thankz...

peAce

its sucks to feel betrayed huh ..but you shouldnt be feelin that hurt gurl..cuz u know theres many fish in sea and why be wit one that gonna hurt u like that nah mean...well thats my opinion but hey anyways cool poem ....and keep up tha nice job...pz and much luv