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08-08-05, 07:54 AM | #1 | ||||
Odi et Amo
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E.C vs Still Motion
IP: E722 4FE7
You can find the rules if you follow this link: !Rules! Read em... Check in by Wednesday Pieces due by Friday Voting closes by Sunday Topic: Your Only Hunger
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08-08-05, 07:56 AM | #2 | |||||||
Evolution
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IP: 0DD2 7DAA
nice topic... check./... g'luck..
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08-08-05, 09:17 AM | #3 | |||||
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IP: 3037 50B7
Oh woot... Can't Believe Were actualli facing each other. Check and Mate and G'lucks
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08-08-05, 12:15 PM | #4 | |||||
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IP: 3037 50B7
Sweetened tongues dripping from spoiled corpse Skin necrosis... patched with papers of divorce Stapled ever so painless to deadened Neurons Cept the man and myself who longs for loosened thongs Resting upon my grave looking up at the night sky The bright moon groped from thoughts applied. Giving a sex change to the man in the moon Two breasts bloom- Its climbs higher resume Acting as a ladder to a celestial bedroom Clambered up by knobby hands... set to swoon The new night’s mistress upon a starry mattress Mist rests upon her pale face - sloping to her chest The deep valley carved out from Mars' frozen waters Melting upon touch... seeping lower into harbor Now mixed with saliva... leashed to his tongue Rung in the hound... took in the scent- filled my lungs Provoking memories rather left unsaved The same one... that pushed me off cloud nine- back into my grave Upon the hard earth – no wait it’s a soft bed A barren tree- no that temptress- playing with my head The tombstone tempered into a mahogany board Tied to both by the imaginations kinky chords Pulling me back to the past… Her full breasts were stuffed with dough That buttered her bread… with semen though Communing with her body… fetish feasts Drowning in the wine of temptation -from the blood of beasts Fermenting in yeast – budding from erections Drunken with the perception of love – cruel deception Was the silver lining to plastic words… It was fake Appraised finally after years… But it was too late… When your drunk- it can often slur your vision Was I in love… no I was sexually smitten Wrong again… my body fiends for the amrita of sex Poured upon the deity that’s erect A zombie can only hunger for one thing... ------------- Amrita – The Hindu Gods Celestial Food, Gives Humans Immortality A penis looks like Shiva Linga… A simplified statue of Shiv which oblations are poured over. Don’t vote if you cant understand… Please. |
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08-08-05, 12:26 PM | #5 | |||||||
Evolution
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IP: 0DD2 7DAA
nice piece mate.. imma drop either later today or tomoro.. basically whenever i have time to write
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08-12-05, 12:40 PM | #6 | |||||||
Evolution
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IP: 0DD2 7DAA
imma need an extension untill saturday night coz i aint gonna be on thanks
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08-12-05, 02:44 PM | #7 | ||||
Odi et Amo
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IP: 7C0A D763
Extension granted till Saturday
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08-13-05, 06:13 AM | #8 | |||||||
Evolution
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IP: 0DD2 7DAA
the fresh scent of perfume fills my lungs with fluid, the big white door, so close as i run through it, friday night, me and my friends have a night of passion, dressing up and sipping tea, talking about fashion, makeup time, "put a little blusher here, eye liner there", "go get me my wig, it saves me straightening my hair", "pick a dress sir" choices choices, "hmmm i love pink", but there's too many to choose from its getting hard to think, "ill take that one" "done, ok now ill take it up to your suite", meanwhile you might want to look at stilletoes for your feet, from yellow to black, every shade, so beautiful to see, but i can see this one pair that are just glearing out to me, perfect fit, omg! i feel like cinderella going to the ball, but i pulled up in a taxi and im not in the great hall, i see a couple of my friends, very niice, they look pretty, so petite, and who knew to choose a dress you gotta be witty, the nights young, so much to do so much to see, almost 2 people in one body, but i feel more like me, this is getting to be a hobby, i'd like it to be summond, because my only hunger wasn't food, but to be a women, |
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08-13-05, 11:56 PM | #9 | |||
Poet's Daughter.
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IP: BC3E E567
Still Motion- I Like this. You had good imaginary, very good portray so detailed. Creative was good, nice approach. Emotion was also good. The best aspect in your verse was the imaginary, quite decent if you ask me.
E.C.- i like doyur verse it was good had nice imaginary. But very much wasn't detailed like still motion. You had weak emotion to tell you the truth. The best aspect in your verse was the Imaginary. Next Time put Emotion in your verse and expand your imaginary by coming very detailed with it or Metaphors and similies and shit. Overall- My votes to Still Motion he had a good nice very well writeen detailed verse. He also had emotions which was good also. E.c. you had a good verse but your imaginary wasn't very much detailed like Still motion plus your Emotion wasn't there. V/ Still Motion.
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08-15-05, 09:47 AM | #10 | ||||
Odi et Amo
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IP: 2AD8 B7B2
Still Motion advances to the semi-finals
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