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Old 12-17-05, 06:12 PM   #1
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Exclamation My Life
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Its Short
A straight up Street Track
Gutter ass flow to it
Grimey soundin beat


My Life

Give me some honest feedback



I got some extra time on the beat if anyone else wants to get on it. *ahem*

I left feed on;
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=217290
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=217163
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=217226
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If you do kegel excercises, you would be able to do something similar without having to hold your tip shut with your hand. After you've been doing them, hold off ejaculating as long as you can to really let the pressure build and then aim for your girlfriend's eye and let 'er rip.. You might get lucky and shoot her eye out. That's probably exaggerating it a bit, but it will still be hilarious
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Old 12-17-05, 08:21 PM   #2
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beat is rockin

Will...u need to dub ur verse and pan them more than u do...will give ur vocals more presence

and ur vocals need to be amped some


I like ur delivery on this

u needed jus a tad more breath control for some of ur lines


but I like this


"cocky but humble"....is that possible?



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Old 12-17-05, 08:47 PM   #3
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Thanks For The Feed.
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If you do kegel excercises, you would be able to do something similar without having to hold your tip shut with your hand. After you've been doing them, hold off ejaculating as long as you can to really let the pressure build and then aim for your girlfriend's eye and let 'er rip.. You might get lucky and shoot her eye out. That's probably exaggerating it a bit, but it will still be hilarious
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Old 12-17-05, 08:52 PM   #4
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a I actually liked this, vocals needed to be a little bit lower to blend in with the beat, and like Q said bout the overdubbin is true maybe you should of overdubbed your whole verse 1 time, but then came back and overdubbed your main words that you felt should of been heard, like you had already done, your flow is what caught my attention pretty good shit, nah sayin
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Old 12-17-05, 10:48 PM   #5
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Old 12-18-05, 11:53 AM   #6
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alright Lethal, I'll remember to do that next time.
ok, uppin for some more feed.
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If you do kegel excercises, you would be able to do something similar without having to hold your tip shut with your hand. After you've been doing them, hold off ejaculating as long as you can to really let the pressure build and then aim for your girlfriend's eye and let 'er rip.. You might get lucky and shoot her eye out. That's probably exaggerating it a bit, but it will still be hilarious
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Old 12-18-05, 12:08 PM   #7
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YOUR VOCALS ARE TO FUCKING LOUD!!!!!!
.And your lyrics are decent...except for the daydream/night mare shit..I heard the same shit from NAs.But then again,your Will.Sun..I can't expect originality from you .
And ur delivery sounded wackk..
But really tho,I think ya got a vioce for a rapping.It's somewhat similar to Big L in my opinion..

So,yea...
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Old 12-18-05, 12:22 PM   #8
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Thanks
I'll take as a compliment comin from Natural Killa
Cod you usually be like
"this wack you gay "

so, umm, yeah. Word
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If you do kegel excercises, you would be able to do something similar without having to hold your tip shut with your hand. After you've been doing them, hold off ejaculating as long as you can to really let the pressure build and then aim for your girlfriend's eye and let 'er rip.. You might get lucky and shoot her eye out. That's probably exaggerating it a bit, but it will still be hilarious
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Old 12-19-05, 01:33 AM   #9
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uppin man
damn
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If you do kegel excercises, you would be able to do something similar without having to hold your tip shut with your hand. After you've been doing them, hold off ejaculating as long as you can to really let the pressure build and then aim for your girlfriend's eye and let 'er rip.. You might get lucky and shoot her eye out. That's probably exaggerating it a bit, but it will still be hilarious
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Old 12-19-05, 01:53 AM   #10
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this beat remind me A LOT of some song i been listening to lately
cant remember what though =/

anyways
the delivery was kinda coo
real original, which i like...cause i consider myself to have a unique delivery, so i like seeing kids do it too
flow is nice, lyrics is hot
overall it is a pretty gutter track like you said

and word to "rubix cubes" that my favorite line
good work fam, only thing i say upped would be quality...hopefully you got rapgame on lock.
nice
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Old 12-19-05, 02:39 AM   #11
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beats dope as hell yo
vocals are too loud
delivery was nice
flow mad nice fam
quality was iight
but overall dis was a nice lil track
keep droppin hot tracks mayne
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Old 12-20-05, 03:25 AM   #12
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Beat is dope

About yo vocals they already touched on that flow was good same for delivery you really comin up son liked this track overall not much more i can say but get a new mic lol keep droppin son =1=
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Old 12-20-05, 11:54 PM   #14
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^my voice is sexy, chico
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If you do kegel excercises, you would be able to do something similar without having to hold your tip shut with your hand. After you've been doing them, hold off ejaculating as long as you can to really let the pressure build and then aim for your girlfriend's eye and let 'er rip.. You might get lucky and shoot her eye out. That's probably exaggerating it a bit, but it will still be hilarious
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