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Old 07-11-05, 05:40 AM   #1
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Mimesis (0-0) vs. E.C (2-2)

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Old 07-11-05, 06:12 AM   #2
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check... imma show for this 1, g'luck
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Old 07-11-05, 12:55 PM   #3
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Yeah, I suck at topicals.. I don't even care.
 
Old 07-15-05, 03:44 AM   #4
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Yo, is it going to be a problem if I drop a few hours late?

I usually get on around midnight, and so I would type something up then and have it up in an hour or two.

Do you care if I do that?
 
Old 07-15-05, 05:07 AM   #5
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lol naa... ill drop later on so jkust drop whenever man its ight
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Old 07-15-05, 06:22 PM   #6
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Men of Honour

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Platoons fight for the need to be free, or is it me,
i mean when a war is over, neither rise to their feet,
they both rage in defeat ,their countries are demolished,
families faces, anger hated, everone seems astoished,
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I'm going to tell you a story of an age, an age when men were respected,
respected for fighting.............. and helping their country stay protected,
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we were soldiers, the type of soldiers with no fear,
killing people and still able to hold back the tears,
for years, we would fight, for no reason at all,
both in bunkers shooting till the opposistion falls,
we would crawl, in the dirt, soldiers filled with mud,
brown marks, and shirts steined with blood,
who were we doing it for? our country, for freedom,
was it worth all this pain or do we really need em,
we stood up and said no, it isn't worth the pain,
doing it for freedom, but still had little to gain,
blood shed for respect but seeing guts isnt gonna win,
we'd do all the dirty work while people pull the strings,
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and so we stood up for our beliefes, and came out on top,
it's finally over, and we see the polititions drop
conquered over the board, gained respect from the people,
Men of honour who managed to clime over a steeple,
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Men Of Honour
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Old 07-16-05, 02:47 AM   #7
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Yeah, mine isn't as long but that doesn't matter..

Oh yeah, "smoke" is referring to a smoke bomb..

Men Of Honor

Blundering, sinking into the underground,
Smoke smothering, covering… placing a sheet around,
My eyes, I cough and realize my time has withered and why?
I miss my mother, and cry, to the point of tears, my years,
Withered away in days, Pissed, to say, the least but I can sense I’m closer here
I can feel it, a shot rings out and stings my ears, I stumble, it's nothing.
Still able to grip the flag, I trip and mumble, "I love my country"
The world has changed, now it's a different place, fake and plastered,
I fight a war, people bitch on my tactics, which by the way… I've mastered,
Tackling the weak ones, I’m battling for freedom, only spoken by few
But I don’t need people to tell me I’m a man of honor to know that it's true

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Old 07-16-05, 12:05 PM   #8
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E.C = an ok verse, i still feel you are approaching the topics you are given well but in your delivery you are still bringing the text battling style. I liked your opening bar, that was simple but had a lot of impact on the verse and hit the topics message directly on point. Not very creative vocab wise, i think that you are still a little basic and could get more complex. there was a nice bit of emotion and imagery in your verse and it delivered a nice image of a war situation and all the feeling behind it. just start to up your vocab and try not doing verses in text style.

Mimesis = short piece, but quite deep in its simplicity. you actually did approach the topic well and delivered it in a non text battle style format. the meaning behind your piece was well thought out and even though it wasn't as long i felt it delivered more emotion and purpose to the topic than E.C did. vocab wise you were the same, not overly complex so you cud use to up that shit a little more, also try to lengthen your verses, cuz some people tend to go for the longer pieces cuz there is more to them, even if the smaller piece was better.

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Old 07-16-05, 12:29 PM   #9
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E.C.- Alright Ok verse here. You Had Imagery in your verse, not weak not that great but average. I didnt feel no emotion in your verse, and plus the approach you put down was ok still could've took a different approach. The vocab wasn't there either, words too basic. No metaphors in your verse, for expanding the imagery. But Ok verse, just too basic.

Mimises-Errrr I liked your good verse, it had imagery in it explaining detail with emotion. Yeah I liked your emotion. I say upp on the vocab though. This was short but it had alot of stuff in it. The best aspect in your piece was Imagery keep that up.

Overall= I'm sorry but i vote for Mim, he had emotion and imagery down, short but deep. E.C. I liked your verse, but it was too basic, the imagery was ok, but mim beat you with emotion he added into his piece. I vote Mim.
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Old 07-18-05, 03:41 AM   #10
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2-0 Me.

Word.
 
Old 07-18-05, 07:23 AM   #11
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Good job man...

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