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Wow~!........its My Homie Iam Facing.......aiiiiight In-deph.........i've Been Waiting For This So Long................so Bring Your Best And I'll Bring Mine~!


Chea...................checking In Early........monday 11/30/04 Chea

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SEE THAT EMPIRE WERD~!

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yep.....Too bad I'ma own you...werd ........

checkin in...

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NOW

In a white chapel marrying this strange women hired by my own mother
Paid her 10,000$ to be my beloved, there wasn’t any love involved here
Pretending to be happy My whole family came here enjoy this fake wedding,
Boxes being placed on the beautiful table but it wasn’t any special objects in it
Do u take this ? The strange women said with an pretending loveable voice. Yes
You may kiss the bride? Disgust to kiss this strange women. My chest touching her breast
Everyone gotten up and clapped, fake tears was dropping like an stunt person fake act
didn’t sense any feelings for this strange women I was just glad I was out the war state
Going by the plan, get married, go separate, few years later get divorce, and that’s it
I feel guilty to leave the rest of my people back in the war state, I guess I’m lucky was it?


THEN MY MIND TURNS



FLASHBACK

The days I’ve been in this cell, has puttin me through fire ……like hell
The burning flame whip , left burnt bruises while I was screaming for help
Hanging on the wall, smelling like arm-pit musk. Smelling terrible. I reek
I’m thirsty I need holy water plz god use ur hands to break these chains free
I’m skinny, as an straw, with no fluid, food, or happiness being sipped in
My teeths has full of cavaties my life is not even like candy not sweetin
The air was pollutant, I still can smell the gun smoke flowing in my nostrils
I can still hear the bullets being blazed, still hears the soldiers body dropping
But I’m not there, I’m smelling fresh air, I’m hearing birds calls from every direction
An big building that I’ve got my sight on, today is the day. I walk in the office imigration


WELCOME TO THE STATE OF USA DRASTIC MEASUREZ__________________________


HEY I TRIED CHEA

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yea both had some interesting peices and ya came creative as well.but i was feelin indephs more cuz he displayed knowledge of the cuban imigrations and all that shit that happened.he had a good story line and so did drastic measurez.drastic had good creativity but im not sure if its just me but there was many parts in drastics piece where he didnt rhyme or maybe its just his accent pronounciation slang shit or sumthin.well this was a close one,both of ya'll keep it up...
vote/Indeph

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Aiight.. Indepth, You have a kind of weird writing style thats really hard to pick up flow on at times.. But the factual nature of your peice really worked well to give me an image in my head. Wasnt bad at all actually. Only other thing I sort of had a problem with was how you cut off your verse half way through, and the rhyming sort of didnt seem to come to an end.. Instead it sort of sounded forced..

DrasticMeasurez, Well I can tell you having been writing topicals for that long brutha, but it wasnt a bad effort.. Main problems and things to work on would be your flow more than anything.. The lines were really badly stretched with only one rhyming word at the end of the line.. And also staying on topic.. I really didnt get where you were going once you flipped over to the second paragraph.. It was like you were starting a new story or something..

Im gonna give this vote to Indepth. For IMO a better representation of the topic.

Peace.

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Basicaly Drastic you skipped around a little too much.........yours couldve been dope with a longer line limit...you need to practice your rhyme scheme

Indepth-good job.....yours was a good story...I felt the hate towards castro......good job

v/Indepth he described his better

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indeph-aight u conveyed imagry in yours........you stayed on the topic more.........you had facts about cuban immigration.......your flow kinda seemed to fall off here and there tho.......good story man.......

drastic-your flow seemed off more than ideph's..........your structure was iffy..........you didnt have too much of a rhyme scheme goin on there..........you kinda went off topic......i understand ur fisrt verse was setting up the topic but it kinda took away from the topic itself........just next time try to convey all your lines towards the topic.......just elevate some man......no disgrace in trying man......

v/indeph.

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alrite this was quite a gud battle here...

indeph - nice verse, ya related ya story to some interestin topics, flow was gud n you had some nice multis in there, nice emotion too....liked

drastic - i was surprised to how gud this was dawg didnt know u cud write topically, ya flow n structure were off in places but generally gud...gud emotion n gud imagary but i think u were just outclassed on this occasion, nice dawg but just keep elevatin...

v/indeph

props to both

can y'all hit mine n i.mind's battle...thx

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