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01-26-06, 11:20 PM | #1 | ||||
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Shortest Poem, Makes You Think
IP: 20B2 DF4A
Picture this
Bright Eyes, When You Gaze In Them, You Can See A Life That's Full Of Potential. One That Amazes You As To How' Something This Precious Could Be Conceived. It Makes You Take A Good Look Back On Life, Reflect And Review On What This Life Has Made You. Life Is Like A Short Blanket. No Matter How Much You Strive To Cover Your Whole Body, There Is Always That One Spot That Is Exposed To The Cold. You Make Due With What You Have Until You Are Satisfied With The Outcome. You Sacrifice Certain Things So That You Can Carry On. Have You Ever Pictured A Child, Looking Up At You, Calling You Daddy? I don't know, it can suck, i personally dont care.. i just thought i was gonna be a father ... yeah. im 14 years old.. i had to share peace |
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02-04-06, 04:39 PM | #2 | |||||
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IP: 97A1 1E68
14 and a dad... Fuck that!!! Nice piece dawg keep it strapped up before you jack up lol
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02-05-06, 04:09 PM | #3 | |||||||
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IP: C8F2 8CC9
this wasnt the deepest poem i ever read u need a lil elevation, the structure wasnt the neatest and it was somewhat espressive but i think u pretty much just did this just ta drop a poem for feed...put your feeling into it and add some emotion in ur writing, ask urself on what ur true feelings are what ur truly going through at that very moment and express urself...if your happy make a poem bout sumthin happy if ur sad make a depressed poem if u strugglin wit sumthin make it inta a poem...when u put ur real emotion into it is when u truly shine as a poet and a rapper but werd this wasnt too bad id give this a 5.5/10 keep elevating Elevation
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02-05-06, 06:30 PM | #4 | |||
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IP: 10C3 AE8A
Pm me with two links to have this re-opend.
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02-05-06, 06:31 PM | #5 | |||
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IP: 10C3 AE8A
. . . . *Closed* |
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