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07-09-02, 07:36 AM | #1 | ||||||
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•Seething•Blizzard•(Life-101)•
IP: B5AC E74C
(hook, borrowed from Eminem's chorus from "Kim", re-worded)
lyrical infractions catch pain in words and action/ when culture satisfaction became a national subtraction/ laughin' at your brother from another mother coughing up blood/ thinking its a joke when he's scoffing with a shrug/ to your every piece of advice that finally ends with an uncompleted life/ a defeated knife lies in the street, never had to fight to enter our home/ once upon a time *BANG* now i'm all alone/ so long, *click* you were so strong, what would go wrong, in this world all about you/ so long, *click* you were so strong, what would go wrong, in this world all about you/ feel the pain, feel the rain of collected tears/ count the seconds of selected years given to kids these days/ when kids give in to freeways out this life, makin' death a relay/ i don't have enough breath to speak what i say, so i just dream it/ watch the world spin on a president's finger trying to reach it/ when i can't bleed its sorrow for the story... it begins and ends/ once upon a time *BANG* no one pretends/ so long, *click* you were so strong, what would go wrong, in this world all about you/ so long, *click* you were so strong, what would go wrong, in this world all about you/ i miss all the friends i've never had, i miss all the experience that i've never grabbed/ in another life, i'd wanna do this twice, just to feel what i'm feeling now/ never would i wanna be that kid with the car playing Eminem really loud/ or the next vanilla ice thinking that i'm feeling proud/ testing 1. 2. umm... 12, "can you feel me now?"/ i just washed the mirror with windex, "that's the real me... wow"/ i'm in my room filling up the chamber/ "i'm sorry world, i just want you to feel my anger"/ *BANG* 6 and 10 o' clock news, no more neighborhood stranger/ so long, *click* you were so strong, what would go wrong, in this world all about you/ so long, *click* you were so strong, what would go wrong, in this world all about you/ so long, *BANG* i thought i was so strong... i was so wrong, living in this world not about me/(fade) signed, ~ProfessoR |
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07-09-02, 06:24 PM | #2 | ||||||
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hey...
IP: 1636 8BC9
nice piece kidd...hmm glad to see more peeps postin up in this area...much luv..God bless..always elevate...1.
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07-09-02, 06:47 PM | #3 | ||||||
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IP: D397 6F44
to your every piece of advice that finally ends with an uncompleted life/
that was a hott bar hun..........it stuck out to me......kinda of a serious issue...n all.........but you pulled it off well............props...and peep mah peice below please........much luv........oh yea teh format was nice n even very nice |
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07-11-02, 10:36 AM | #4 | ||||||
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Dope ish babyboi,
flowed well ... Diggin ya style! Keep doin ur thang ... Pz xXx DiMe ~1~ |
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07-13-02, 10:26 AM | #5 | ||||||
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IP: F8DE F595
very good piece all the way through...worded so well...structured so well....overall was a well executed piece...had some real strong truths....some cynical....some not so....
...respect.... |
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