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Old 03-12-05, 02:54 PM   #1
....Gone....
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Falling-

I've fallen onto the darkness, as where i can not see my future
The power of sins, Bounding me tightly around my soul, it can't breathe
Ever since i've putted my bible down and center my thoughts i've lost track of god
Where is your hands o great one? Please save me, what do i have to do to get you
The devil power is highly so remourseful, having no emotion or care for anyone
I need my devil palms in your hands god,please remove the "i dont love god" curse
Devil turned me into an addict, made my heart black, and devilish of all,removed my love ones
Turned my tears to the color of red, so i forever more, my visions will always be blurr to light
Just sitting in the darkness, with my future non-existent and my love in my hear went away


(asked him self) What do i need to do to get out of this?

(GOD) BELIEVE MY CHILD, BELIEVE


Saved by believing-


Faintly my heart is dying in the darkness of this bounding shell
It's hard to crack, but god said the only way to remove it is to believe
Believe in what? I dont believe in anything good, and my heart is black
There wasn't one happiness in my life, nothing made me smile or laughed
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(GOD) BELIEVE MY CHILD
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Believe in me, that i will help you get out of this
Believe in tha outcome, there will be happyness
Believe in my powerd that your soul will be pure
Believe in my hands that i will make your visions clear
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My head and my heart of black with devilish powers is gone
As I hold the bible in my hand, thank you god for telling me to believe
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Old 03-12-05, 03:58 PM   #2
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aight,
Imagary and the descriptive way
you expressed yourself was good.
Even though this was a good poem.
I didn't enjoy it as much as your others.
Since I'm not a religious person so I didn't relate to it.
but that aint your fault.Good job,respet.
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Old 03-12-05, 06:10 PM   #3
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i think you coulda did betta even doe it was good but you had betta ones you had yo emotion dere it was good but not great i still liked it doe
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Old 03-12-05, 06:15 PM   #4
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Yeh aiight, uppin for more feedbacks
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