Ok here goes my first post lol....I liked this a lot, the beginning did not grab my attention and I overcame my severe ADD and continued to read. In doing this, I found a very decent descriptive piece. I did not expect the poem to become what it became and that is what I enjoyed most about it. I hate when I start a poem and can almost finish it myself because it is so damn cliche.

My favorite part:




Well keep it up and look out for my stuff, I'll be posting tonight or tomorrow.

-Krissy