bleh... felt like keying something... yeah... its about a guy who can't say shit for himself... but ends up making a difference in the world -edited in-

sitting on the toilet-he's joyous, the king of his words-nobody's annoying|
his life's spite is boyant, a dead-end job and no enjoyment|
a robot to employment-till one day, his therapist suggests medication|
so he starts off swallowin' and experiences head-spins|
instead of hatin' he hides his anger inside of a basement|
his only best friends are the bare walls and displacement|
its been a week now and death is what the pills are craving|
they thin his veins and make him feel the pain of hatred|
the world's reality pushes him... so he loses his patience|
fresh outta pills and light bulbs, his mind is vacant|
he grabs a gun and shakes it but the tv screen doesn't flinch|
getting mad is all he can do, so he screams "you fucking bitch!"|
the sparks fly and singe the curtins, he laughs and grins|
he leaves his apartment burning, the streets spin as people stare|
he swings the gun in the air and goes insane on 9th and philip ave.|
he kills a mother with a stroller and claims he didn't care|
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a few years later he doesn't work the crappy job but became a author|
the shit i just rhymed was a novel he wrote, the pills gave him the offer|
stay tuned for the next issue "cruel vicadin and the meat locker"|

yeah, it sucks, so what, i was bored

whats up the other half. i was feelin this till u rushed your ending. c'mon now how do kill sum1 with a stroller. so untill the cruel vicadin and the meat locker part duce is coming out, know this is the terrible dooce signing out
peace

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the one that watches the watchmen:

welll....mos def not your best.

I must say it was rather original.

But, come on dog, your better then this, you gotta get yaself back, it will happen, you just gotta let it.

hey dogg it was good with origininality but no real 'flaring' in your endin dogg.. but still vocab was good and flow aight
keep spittin though
peace out...

This was nice for a key....I know U can do better....But like U said it was a key....Not meant to come out hot....I do that shit so I feel U....But get at me on PM....Peace

It was a'ight... still not the best shit i've seen, but for a key it was pretty hype.. followed a story and shit, flowed pretty nicely.. yea uppin' yo..

could u check one of mine...

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joey... dude... where did i kill a someone with a stroller... i'm sayin' the gun went off and killed a mother with her baby IN the stroller... anyway... i ain't stressin' that this was wack, but yeah, i was just messin' around with words as a key... replies were appreciated...


peace