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Old 10-24-03, 01:05 AM   #1
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"5 yr. rememberance"

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written awhile ago. but whenever i see a chance i pst this up somewhere. cuz i dont want my boy's memory to EVER be forgotten!

'5 year rememberance'

chorus:
5 years/
full of so many tearz/
but ive let go of all my fears/
cuz i got some things i need you to hear/

verse 1:
damn our livez had only just begun/
in life, bein at age 12 is like stil bein one/
but we had alot of fun/
in tha time we had/
its just to damn bad/
your life ended like that/
that ady wuz wack/
i wish i had a time machine so i could go back/
and change tha day/
make you not go that way/
damn i remember all of our times like it wuz yesterday/
that mornin you gave me a ride to school/
on your bike, even then we wuz cool/
we wuz neva actin a fool/
back when we wuz lil innocents/
but now im into shit/
ever since tha day you violently split/

chorus:
5 years/
full of so many tearz/
but ive let go of all my fears/
cuz i got some things i need you to hear/

verse 2:
i didnt know how i should feel or wut to do/
i lost tha 1st poerson i called a TRUE/
that wuz all i knew/
damn mario i miss you/
i wish that i had complete power over a genie, so i could wish you/
back to tha erth/
some new type of rebirth/
man, how can things happen like this/
we wuz livin in bliss/
we neva thought that could happen/
but we wuz rong, cuz dogg, jay wuznt laughin/
he wuz almost in tears/
and i knew it wuz one of my werst fears/
cuz jay neva cried/
no matta wut it wuz he hed his hed high/
but for some reason this day he didnt wana try/
he looked like he lost all his pride/
he asked me if i knew and if we wuz cool/
i sed yes and then he told me tha bad news/
i couldn believe it, then i called yo crib/
your ma sed you no longer physically existed/
man my heart got twizted/
i miss you kid/
whyd you have to leave so sudden/

chorus:
5 years/
full of so many tearz/
but ive let go of all my fears/
cuz i got some things i need you to hear/

verse 3:
you were to good for death/
you should still be alive and far from yo last breath/
maybe god wuz trying to teach me a lesson/
but man i wouldn listen it jus made me give up on pplz blessin/
cuz that wuz rong to do/
you had so much more planned for you/
if i eva met god id be demandin you/
come back to erth right now/
leave tha heaven to come back to tha ground/
where you could keep me/
company/
and we could gro up like originally/
planned/
b4 god through in his hand/
and decided to make turn into a bad man/
i still miss you, and think about you all tha time/
thinkin back on our memories getz me cryin/
i guess im still tryin/
to deal with tha fact that nobody wuz lyin/
wen they told me you were gone and i wanted to be blind n/
i kept thinkin about dyin/
i cant help but picture you up there flyin/
so high n/
lookin down on me/
makin a frown on me/
lookin down from a cloud on me/
cuz your eternally/
in my heart where youll alwayz be/
cuz it wuz alwayz we/
and now after today, it will have been 5 yearz/
why must god make so many people shed tears/
wut did you ever do rong/
nothing, so why did you take you along/
time ago/
mario i cant let you go/
im remminiscin on tha times we spent together/
tha time we spent chillin all summer and in tha cold weather/
playin basketball, baseball, and cath/
chillin wit paul talkin bout he bustin tekz/
and we got so much respect/
from all those people/
and your gone so life eemz decietful/
i dont know if your restin peaceful/
or if your up in heaven gleefull/
all i know, is that i am gonna see you/
at tha crossroadz when i get there/
i needa give you a hug and look at you and admire your hair/
and let you know otu of all my trues i only cared/
for one person above nate/
and that wuz, so ill see you at tha pearly gates/

R.I.P.
MARIO J. RAPOSO

OCTOBER 28TH 1985
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JUNE 16TH 1998
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Old 10-24-03, 01:13 AM   #2
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a good read but very simple you word selection could oif been more expressive of your emotion but other then that a good read.
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Old 10-24-03, 01:25 AM   #3
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yea, i thought so too. it wasnt as good. at that time i was still kind of new at it. but now i've got a pretty good style, and a bigger vocab. his b-day is october 28th... so on his b-day i will be writing a special song for him. it would have been his 18th b-day. so that will be up here when its finished
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Old 10-24-03, 02:02 AM   #4
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I felt this peice it was VERY simple and could use ALOT of touching up... but it got the message across... good drop, i didnt get bored reading it... but you could use some elevation... keep droppin homie, you remind me of myself when i started flowin
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