topic: historical moment

Due date: dec 12th
Voting ends: dec 15th

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Look Down At Your Wrist, Your Watch Is Spinning Backwards
Grey Hair Turns To Color, And In Reverse Fly Black Birds
Reappearing Buffalo Heards, Back In The Land Before Time
Life Goes From Old To Young, Like You're Holding Down Rewind
The World Was Refined, No Pollution Was Yet Known
The Air And Water Were Clean, With No Holes In The O-Zone
And Everything Was Home Grown, When People Had Morals
And Kids Werent Getting Shot, Over Silly Turf Quarrels
Listen To The Chorals, They Sung Because They Believed
They Never Questioned Faith, It Was All They Could Conceive
And They Didnt Grieve, Never Was A Tear Wiped On A Sleeve
They Percieved Death As A Step, To No Longer Being Niave
Then On A Midsummer's Eve, Somebody Questioned Perfection
Gathered A Collection, And Then Promised Them Protection
All They Had To Do, Was Follow A Few Guide Lines For Life
Promised Bliss After Death, But He Had Lied To Minds Alike
So They Took A Hike, Over A Desert For Three-Hundered Years
Never Questioned His Ambition, Never Did They Shed A Tear
They Never Felt Alone Or Fear, Only Felt A Great Hope
Even When Life Was Rolling, It Had Been Perched Atop A Slope
Started To Slip Away Like Soap, Drowning Like A Sinking Boat
Untill The Day, They Had Been Givin What They Asked For
They Rushed Into A Belief, When It Really Was A Masked Door
They Stepped Through The Opening, Expecting To Find Bliss
Wandering For 300 Years, Made People Forget They Exist
And Now They Arent Missed, A New World Has Unfolded
While There Was No God Present, The World Had Been Molded
Nobody Was Scolded, The Earth Took A Leap And Passed Peace
Cause Now Instead Of Fair Justice, You Get Beat By Police
Violence Increased, People Only Cared For Themselves
The Only Place The Bible Is Worth Anything Now, Is On Bookstore Shelfs

Opens Door To A Bitter Eerieness...WTF??

streets left empty...as if they were evacuated in all of Tandem
I'd pick out the most Tranquil areas but experienced'em Random
peace was left Bemused by this overthrow of Bewilderness
even tho in life we settle for shit..we still strive for the Best
or was this a Test? were somethin trying to Trick or Illusion Us
nothing there to see yet I can still feel this Soft but Trivial Buzz
was there a major event happening? and i wasn't Invited!!
the Queen may have died or a major Superstar Jus Knighted?
but i was Blighted by a sudden rush of Anger from a Far
turned the next corner to see Broken windows n Cars left Ajar
doubtfull Intuition telling me there was Evil scowling the Air
suddenly I break into Prayer and tell the Lord "please be Fair"
as I uttered my last words there came a Thunder in my Face
I held my Body jus Incase coz the Tumor shuck the Place
nuttin left on me but just the Standard police Issued Mace
it was like cat and mouse yet I dont know whos bein Chased
Inbedded in sanctimonial Referals to films like 28 days Later
as the hours of Loneliness grew my thoughts began to Cater
sick Visions of a world where there was jus me and Myself
talkin to myself???!!! shit...thats gotta be bad for my Health
just to calm my Nerves I take a few more Prescribed than Usual
I always wanted to be Alone but now I'd rather go Commutal
Now I seem to be slipping in and out of the Deepest of Sleeps
I'm just resting my Eyes coz this silence gives me the Creeps
can't feel my face no more and I feel Affect of these Pills
a Fascist head's going round and round..much like Wind-Mills
Ending up this way..wishes became a Historical Moment Digested
see fate took its place Injested..*coughs*..Vital signs Arrested

Wishes do come true..sometimes
Be Carefull What you Wish For

Mental God - That was a very nice verse... I was feeling the vocab, subject matter, flow, and the rhyme scheme was pretty good as well. You came with somthing uniqe, I can tell you put some thought into this...

Then On A Midsummer's Eve, Somebody Questioned Perfection
Gathered A Collection, And Then Promised Them Protection
^ I was feeling those lines right there, my favorite ^
Nice drop hommie...

Phil.M.Up - I liked the vocab, and the metaphores that were in there. The flow and rhyme scheme were pretty basic though. I wasnt feeling where you took the topic that much either. You did have a couple bars in there that really caught my attention...

doubtfull Intuition telling me there was Evil scowling the Air
suddenly I break into Prayer and tell the Lord "please be Fair"
^ I like it when people bring some religion into the rap ^

Vote - Mental God
Conclusion - He just was better all around. Both verses were good, but mental god took this in about every area... Nice drops from both of you though...

OUT

-High Class a.k.a Confusion

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Both amazing verses

Mental god, your flow was awesome your vocab and structure was great the way you kept the reader involved to this piece was really well done you had a great story line...no flaws in that at all

Phil Em Up, you also had a great verse your flow was great and your rhyme scheme was good, i liked your descriptions also very well done

Overall I think mental took this, this was close but mental had an impressive verse, that was awesome

Vote Mental God

Good verses both of you though

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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...851#post1148851
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i really gotta say Mental here...
he just had a better imagry n all in his...
i gotta say it everything goes his way handsdown...
decent drop from Brix but nothing spetacular...
good drop mental

I gotta say Ill-Mental got my vote. Phil M. Up is getting consistently better, but there was a whole level of implied deep shit in Mental's lines. Nice battle to the both of you.

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Im glad you guys didn't do the same thing/concept. Made it
intresting to read both verses

Mental..
your shit was deep.. ya flow was amazing. i really seen you
improve topically.. really dope. the finisher was a good thought
provoker.. really good piece

Walter..
not bad.. i liked the concept.. although i though you coulda
done better with it ya know? dope piece none the less
i just felt there was more potential you coulda lived up too

v/ Mental God

Great job

Brix - you came w/ a good concept, liked the verse
Kept me reading w/out losing my attention..
v.good verse, great stuff...props

Metal - Just some real good 'thinking' shit there,
Flow was clean and tidy all the way, really deep thought's
and some great imagery...

i'm giving this to ment because altho both were great drops
Ments was just a notch above everything...
Props to both

V.Mental

pz