If yall wanna hear the beat to this song.... it's here
http://www.soundclick.com/bands/4/opeymusic.htm
it's the slow beat(rough draft)


Krem's Verse

(Piano Starts) Talking
Damn man,
what's up with all this beef
it's like....no one cares no more
about people and how they live
man....we need to try and atleast to give
lets try to make the world a better place
for the future generation to live
lets just stop all this war shit
and just....live in peace
or is that even possible
who knows......
all we can do
is to just keep....
prayin....

(Beat Start's) Rapping
ever since the day i was born and brought into this world
i knew that one of these day's things would unfurl
since the age of one to the age of eighteen
nuclear threats and wars like i ain't ever seen
i wonder why we can't all chill and just be friends
before the last bomb drops, and the world ends
it's like no matter what we do or where we go
people tryin to control the world, with their power and dough
kamikaze bombers committing suicide just for their pride
just think bout how their loved ones felt inside
soldiers risking their lives so we can live in peace
turn on the tv, watchin the terrorist level increase
makes me feel a little worried when that shit goes up
it's like sitting here waiting for an attack...fuck
but atleast we caught hussien in his little hole
in jail for life, with no chance of parole
that makes me feel a little safer in the world today
maybe i'll live a full life, not gon be blown away
i don't wanna see anymore people in sorrow
but who knows, maybe a bomb drop tomorrow
the world today is just to damn hard to predict
someday we'll live in peace...without conflicts


MP~PHASIZ Verse
Life is like war and we're livin' in the battlegrounds
What creeps in the shadows has me scared to look around
Terrorists droppin' bombs like a meteor shower
Fallin' to earth at a hundred miles per hour
Families scurry about in search for somethin' to eat
What was once their homes is now rubble in the street
Lookin' at the children you can see death in their eyes
Parents mourn over their bodies as they say their goodbyes
Don't accept the truth so I refuse to believe my eyes
While the guilty walk among us hidden in disguise
Calculate the deaths and injuries to figure out the sum
It's like a livin' nightmare that you can't wake up from
The stress of war threats have people killin' theirself
Earth is becomin' a growin' gravesite within itself
I fear just to hear every tick-tock of the clock
Cause I know at the same time there's a reload of a glock
The cops and F.B.I. claim they have this case on lock
And at the same time they're outlinin' bodies in chalk
This situation's not bein' handled it's bein' untouched
It's so far out of reach we have no grasp or clutch
We're all regretably waitin' to experience such a crime
And till it finally happens is just a matter of time.........



Oh.....and i would like to thank ...Opey... for letting me use one of his beats, thanks alot man
Drop some feedback on this please
peace

come on now......don't sleep on this

k krem i was really feelin your verse u have elivated HEAPS, other cats verse was also good

i wonder why we can't all chill and just be friends
before the last bomb drops, and the world ends
^that was real simple but dope

U have a simple ryme scheme but it is still dope,

Keep spittin and we might be able to hook up for a collab inm future

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Soft focus

Whats the point of living?

The voices in my head Feat. Rule

Unlikely Alias

More Comming soon!

nice drop.. couldnt really listen to the beat seems as how im at school and i aint got any speakers... but ima check it when i get home... that way i can give you a better reply. But in reality this was pretty solid nice concept decent imagery keep droppin...

Peace...

come on don't sleep on this, this is the first piece i actually worked on, drop some feedback please

peace

come on ya'll , stop sleeping on this
peace

This was a good flow.
after reading it in my head to the beat, each line of the song was a good length to fit the beat of the tune.

nice drop, good 1 Krem
keep it up

Laterzzz

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Mc_Russie

yeah man this was dope, nice flow throughout the whole thing like the other guy said its simple rhyming but it turned out decent, good verses from both of you, 1 thing to work on i guess is vocab, peace

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Corrupted Visions

it's like no matter what we do or where we go
people tryin to control the world, with their money and dough

^ Isnt money and dough the same thing? currect me if im wrong ^

I thought you had a good topic. It was a simple write, but you still added a nice feel to it. Both of you did, by putting in your personal opinions on it. I respect that. You had alright vocab, maybe work on that a little bit. Structure, just legnthen the lines. It was an over all average rap, but I liked the feel of it. Nice drop hommies...
Keep elevating...

( PLEASE RETURN THE FAVOR AND PEEP THE OPEN MIC IN MY SIG, APPRICIATED )

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oops money was spose to be power, so it would be power and dough

ah well i fixed it, thanks for pointing it out

uppin

nice way of starting your ryme and above all, it was nice to see your creativity. thats tha shit that be tight dog.

thanks yall
uppin

Very nice...I must've missed this earlier..Both of ya had good flow thourghout the whole thing..good content and good scheme to go along with it..nice work..


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people say you've elevated, i can't back that up because i cannot recall reading any of your other pieces, but if this was anything to go by, then i think you have talent..flow was spot on, like RTopic said, just add more complex vocab, and you'll have elevated a whole lot more...

try not to dwell on how far you have to go, stop and look for a moment just how far you've come.