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all i do is cause trouble at school
what am i gonna do when the teachers take me as a fool dammit whole class thinks i'm cool now this teachers taking away my respect and my drools how am i gonna write my raps without any skills homies and playas think i take drugs and pills no time for those G's i have to climb the rap hill school work all day no hang outs study hard withut any doubts i'm a human being i have ups and downs sometimes the principal take me as a clown cuz i'm fucken brown chorus:is like a dream walking around with books in my hands trying to figure out who's gonna help me out and who i'm gonna depend around all i see and hear is knowledge its blurring in my fucken ears it's surrounded school sucks i wish i was fucken grounded students everywhere talking and walking you see this faces everyday it feels like stalking friends pushing eachother and mocking teachers teaching without any stoppings i'm sick and tired of it i need some smoking i aint a drug addict so i was just joking subjects changing every period sometimes in the school grounds i see some syringes they keep running by dont they know that its dangerous? chorus2x ![]() |
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bit of a played topic...most feel that way when going thru school.... handled it ok...seen better...mainly id say improve the scheme...use some multis n word play....it will help the feel of the drop and the flow....but ok i suppose...pz....
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IP: 3944 7C5F
never rap about school again..........topic is wack as hell.........but uhh, the structure was pretty simple............rhyme scheme was ok..........vocab was basic..........overall this was a pretty basic drop........keep postin and elevatin homie.........
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IP: 4577 CD9A
..I'm not feeling this piece at all..the whole flow was very weak..your vocab was below average...your wordplay was 3rd grade level...other than that..^^
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IP: 6FDC 23CB
You need to leave 3 links or 3 names of people you left feedback to or this will get closed, Thanks.
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IP: 5675 D727
Lol Decent And Kina Played But True....
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wut u sed was tru bout school n shit........but i think its a weak topic.......try spittin bout sumthin else.......the vocab was weak.......but jus keep droppin......GOOD LUCK! ~1~
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IP: 2CBD A15D
all that was true.could of put more punches tho.but it was good i liked it.
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IP: EC0B 84C7
not bad........u gon hear a lot of peeps tellin u 2 make it mo complex ...but hey, u gotta crawl b4 u can walk
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IP: 5203 B663
it wasnt great . But it wasnt to bad. Just very simple, and not deep enough. Keep doing your shit and youll get there
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IP: 12AF 5D2D
Not really feeling this peice at all.. try a new topic.. nobody realy wants to read about school sucks.. sorry
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IP: 12AF 5D2D
ohh and you need to add 3 links to 3 previous battles you have read other wise this thread will get closed
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IP: C1DA C961
ya everyboddy hates school u need to elevate more ur flow wasnt very good eitha
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IP: C1DA C961
school sucks-and so does this drop
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Here's Lookin At You Kid
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IP: BDE8 1790
a little bit of a played concept but you did it nicely.....good stroy telling....good choice of words nice vocab....a little basic but your metas and enjoyment made it nice.....struct was ok....nice job
keep droppin
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