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Old 09-30-05, 06:25 PM   #1
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This rage won't seem to disapear when im on stage
I feel so lost inside going to work with a lousy wage
im getting more mad by the days sick of my muth'as ways
with nothing to do in dis empty house but just sit n gaze
it's like my lifes been erazed the outsider dat never fit in
My mother don't even care so i got half my soul missin
livin in here is like prison losing all my reality and vision
and this pain won't go away so imagine urself in my position
Death is what im wishin im'a an alien put on this earth
2 serve a hell sentence and still serving it since birth
Nobody seems to care anymore just left on the floor
neglected in the past and don't know what i gotta live for
all this shit's gotta stop cuz im like a a volcano waiting to erupt
everythings fucked nothings right and it all sucks
how would you feel if ya family treated you like a nobody
You mutha fuckers think u won but you simply cannot stop me
you wanna judge me but i won't give in till one of u pops me!
HATE ME Not care for me and carry on being cocky!
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Old 09-30-05, 06:29 PM   #2
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I give you props son, nice drop.
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Old 09-30-05, 07:37 PM   #3
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thanks..............
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Old 10-01-05, 12:38 AM   #4
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Drop two link to two OM's you have left decent feedback on or this will be closed
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Old 10-01-05, 11:13 AM   #5
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Your vocabulary was basic, structure was okay, flow was okay, concept was nothing special. Nobody doesn't rhyme with stop me, or maybe it was just 'nobody' and 'me' meant to be rhyming, in which case that was stupid. Better then what maddrapper does, not better then 40% of RV. 7/10

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Old 10-01-05, 03:39 PM   #6
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Hey not bad man, I liked it
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Old 10-01-05, 03:47 PM   #7
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damn... u got "technique" lol

but still u gotta elvate ur vocab

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Old 10-01-05, 04:58 PM   #8
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^ No, not 9/10, this was a shitty OM.
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Old 10-10-05, 05:47 PM   #9
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it was ight duke u gotten a lil betta but keep writin & u'll reach ya potential but i'll give diz a 6/10 ....mainly cuz tha vocab was betta diz time den ur last piece, structure was good, imagery & topic u wrote about jus seemed off a lil ...but not bad
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Old 10-10-05, 08:59 PM   #10
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YEAH THIS WAS NICE i FELT THIS i PICTURED YOU TRAPPED IN STREET WITH NO ANSWERS COULD'VE RHYMED IT MORE BUT STILL A GOOD DROP 6/10 KEEP UP THE GOOD WORKS HOMEY
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