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08-25-04, 05:32 AM | #1 | ||||
Straight From Da Lab!
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A world to hate.....
IP: 7189 3E18
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=144989
^^^my link showing my feedback this goes out to all niggas willing to read all this........i'm just righting how i feel right now, it's a horrible last couple of days for me check this out......... somewhere in this world i know there's a perfect life, nigga with mo niggas and they've got ambition to strife what about the rest of us? what do we see on the street? niggas raping each other, niggas jacking for new seats, i cant believe this, how my whole life was well beaten by player too fond of selves, have you wonder who made them the reason and origin of sucker-free world was shapen niggas with warm hearts molded to fit the criterias of Satan! no wonder i was stressed when i walk into class with no clues i couldn't do my work was i suffering from the blues? i look round the class and all i see are dickheads and idiots maybe in this place there would be one thats one in a million things gets worse emotionally, this indian bitch stole my dough i got a couple of hoes that has labeled me asshole for what ever reasons do i have to deserve what i get will i become one of them niggas who peeps are trying to forget? for desparate measures, i wish i could start life again where my lyrical textures improvements are dramaticly gained i'm just speaking my mind, what DO i have to gain? and yet there is frankly, no one to blame..... those blasted black rappers, drastic white bastards fucking round with me are frantic fantastics fucking my low status the fact is, rappers seem to all have horrible living makes me want to relive those ill moments which had filled in whats missing we niggas aren't gonna let intentions turn to the center of attention we wish to be listed under those of honorably mentions why am i here while undeserving niggas living in multi million mansions? i'm not to blame where i'm born, yet i'm labeled under useless inventions in my final years, i'm gonna make sure i can fight this who ever find this is gonna show that we can strike fists so let's ditch out the wrongfuls and put in the righteous who knows, maybe we could finally put a end to this crisis......... yeah..........
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08-25-04, 05:33 AM | #2 | ||||
Straight From Da Lab!
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IP: 7189 3E18
i want some feedback on what i can improve on..............so holla back
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08-25-04, 05:33 AM | #3 | |||||||
~Mr. Punch-Lines~
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IP: 5043 32F4
yo man you need to fix yer stucture a bit cuz yer stucture fucks the flow up but you got good wordplay n shit 7/10 overal nice drop
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08-25-04, 05:47 AM | #4 | |||
Klassic
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IP: 6CF5 20BB
word play wus good, personnaly i think it could use jsut a bit more
the structure fucked u up though, it fucked up the flow, so work on that and keep tryin. 6.5/10
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08-26-04, 12:36 AM | #5 | ||||
Straight From Da Lab!
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IP: 9E5A FA61
uppin............................................. .........
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08-26-04, 12:58 AM | #6 | ||||
$Thug Life$
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IP: 95B6 76CD
coo man keep droppin hey nice sig may the force be wit you no hate man...
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08-26-04, 01:40 AM | #7 | ||||
Straight From Da Lab!
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IP: 9605 F333
^^^lol, well at least the kid was honest!
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