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11-16-03, 11:01 AM | #1 | |||||||
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win and lose but still i remember and smile
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I remember the day I met you
And the day God made you mine I remember the day I lost you And will till the end of time But through all the tears and heartaches There’s one thing that made me glad That you chose me to share with you The wonderful years we had I often lay awake at night When the world is fast asleep And take a walk down memory lane With tears upon my cheeks I cannot bring those great days back When we were together But loving memories of the past Will be with me forever just something short and quick but had to get it written down and out ~Tera~
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11-16-03, 11:33 AM | #2 | |||||||
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This was cute.. it showed a lot of emtion... really there isnt much crit for me to say other than this was a good poem, it obviously got some feelings out.. nice job.
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11-16-03, 12:18 PM | #3 | |||||||
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nice and cute
just a sweet lil poem but a real poem nice work,... good flows and you got your feelings out, ... and that, of course, is the most important thing keep droppin resp |
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11-16-03, 01:21 PM | #4 | ||||||
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A great poem that came from your heart. Short and sweet. And may I say a great job. I personally loved it, and see nothing wrong with it. Memories are what ppl cherish and those help us go through life, even if they are painful. Flow was great and it came from ur heart with all of the emotion you had. Great job. Most respect.
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11-17-03, 09:20 AM | #5 | ||||||
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Even as short as this may be it got me thinking deep. Taking the memories of me and my princess and holding them tighter to my heart. Wanting to hold her tighter to me and never let her go. Memories are good and bad. With her I want to make them a lifetime of memories till the end. as they say "till death do we part". Thanks filed I needed this. Much love and repsect. JT
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11-18-03, 06:46 PM | #6 | |||||||
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thank you all for reading this
it was only meant to be a short and simple piece i enjoy reading your replies to my pieces makes me want to write more every time lol drop a reply at soft focus presents: untitled a collab with existance and me ~Tera~ DONT HATE
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R.I.P to my lost girl
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11-18-03, 08:25 PM | #7 | |||
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wow....damn
this was nice i can relate to all of this, it's crazy the simple-ness made this piece more effective portrayed the emotion, the sense of being over, but still holding on to the good times this hit deep, i find that funny but thats neither here nor there, nice piece girl keep writing i'll keep reading
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