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01-10-04, 08:28 PM | #1 | ||||||
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Aight yo, well this is my first post here, I wrote this at work while I was on break in about 10 mins. I hope to post more rhymes I make in the future and if any Crews need someone, holla at me. Peace
My lyrical weapon of choice // is my voice // i use it to boist about my new style of speech // aimed at the world // trying to teach gettin my message across // killin these MC's // crucifying em' on a cross no ressurection occuring // you're in the wrong direction // start turning my flow equipted with venom // sinking through your pours // peircing the denim i send chills down your spine // with each verse of this rhyme shout out for a hersche // this is the scene of a murder crime im like a bomb ticking // ready to set off at any time my words are stimulatin' // have bitches anticipatin' the arrival of your rival's survival // hold you bible and start to pray // beg God not to get slayed // by this blade's spade portrayed by those who are afriad // patch yourself up with a band-aid and try again or end your prayer now // say Amen Any feedback will be appriciated Last edited by ScarNflictR : 01-10-04 at 09:23 PM. |
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01-10-04, 10:51 PM | #2 | |||||||
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IP: D4CC BCDF
nice. thats all i can say imma put in a good word for u at dynasty soldiers
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01-10-04, 10:56 PM | #3 | |||||||
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IP: D0CB 44B2
that was good but yo homes try to work on yo structure and then this would be fuckin ausome ........... keep at it ............. fo real
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01-10-04, 11:03 PM | #4 | ||||||
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IP: 8382 A551
thanks guys, yea its a lil sloppy but i flowed it nice in my head, i was trying to put it to flow with a beat and i have a few that would work nice but im busy doing some homework n shit so ill touch it up later / make a new flow at a later time, jus laying down some rhymes to see what you guys think of it, keep the comments coming yo, peace
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01-11-04, 09:48 AM | #5 | ||||||
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uppin'
any other feedback before i let this one die? |
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