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yo im feelin kinda caught between heaven and hells kinda hot,
suspended in time comin up with rhymes losin my mind in this madness. do i apply what i know or just forget what im taught so distruaght, searchin for the awnsers in a world of sadness. so confuzed what did i lose i spend my life feeling used and abused, i woke up in a dream wanting to scream cant come to grips with what is real, i have to deal with the paths i chose, and express the issues i feel.
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IP: C1DA C961
yo, that was pretty personal.
but you need to work on have equal syllables on each line. work on that and it will look more like a poem.
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....Trunks R 4 Bodies....
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IP: 0ABC 464B
yah it was a hard read for a poem
but i love the topic one love........ |
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yawn
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IP: 06D4 9403
yeah the structure was messed up with the rhyming you used. Was kind of hard for me to read to, thoug it was pretty good.
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