a simple poem, with a simple message.

a topic that gets done alot, by many ppl, coz its felt by everyone at some time or another, so its an easy topic to relate to when you read anothers piece on it. but one thing you have to think about when you write about a topic done alot, is that you should try to place it under a different light, make them think about that topic a whole different way, or see something that many dont, i dunno just give it your own twist, make it different. i felt you could have had some more detail to this piece, and that it could have gone further, or had more background, its a piece you can take and build on top of now some.

~Tera~
DONT HATE

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