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01-07-04, 05:20 PM | #1 | ||||||
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12 bars quick shit
IP: 152B 76B3
back up back up cus here comes danger/
call me the new member of wu tang cus im comming from the 36 chambers/ dawg u got something on me please/ i got ya gurl screaming ooouuuu like Alicia Keys/ when it comes to da mic im wit it/ but if you wanna fight drop drop ya shit homie and lets get it/ look im comming straight at you so get used to it/ niggaz be runnin they mouth but they dont do shit/ im da P.i.m.p of the century of course/ i'll run a train on ya gurl like a metro north/ if you want the title that i have then come on wit it/ my castastrophy csauses tragedeys you don treally want it/ |
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01-07-04, 05:27 PM | #2 | |||||||
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thought it was ok... but didnt flow too good... i prefer it when the rhyme is carried further... but decent wordplay n scheme....pZ
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01-08-04, 04:25 AM | #3 | ||||
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Yeah this was alright.....your structure was alright for a quick key i guess...like deva said had some alright wordplay in this....Vocab was alright i thought....had some ok multies, could have been better with those...keep at it.
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01-08-04, 05:31 AM | #4 | ||||||
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yo
IP: 194A A42B
it was aaaight, wasn't feeling it that much, you got good vocab-and a ok flow, keep elevating dogg.
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01-08-04, 07:29 AM | #5 | ||||||
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IP: 6F9E F23B
aiiight but nowt special....ADVICE-:find a conept n stick with it
cos it seemed all over the place....it's 1 of those that'd sound better than when readin it......flow aiiight,vocab...bah....etc 6/10 |
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01-08-04, 07:50 AM | #6 | ||||||
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IP: F127 8F9A
Dey call me Unknown Skillz//
When I step up ta da mic I give da niggaz chillz//................... And when Im done roastin you...there still blood on da grillz// You need to taste da defeat like Skittlez//................................ To me ur rhymes are small like Edward and the Littlez//........... The consequenses are horrid like payin da over due billz//....... When Im done wit a battle....No problem B i still got da illz//... Im an unstoppable force and corrosive//......................... U just a big gas bubble dat get explosive//.................... Imma preclude you from dis battle//.............................. If I fall off da horse I just jump back on the saddle DONE |
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01-08-04, 01:04 PM | #7 | ||||||
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IP: 927C 4CFE
i don't know...... it seemed kind of basic and I really didn't get the topic......... flow was off too, structure was okay........ i think you could do better.......... pz
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