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Old 02-09-04, 05:58 PM   #1
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Exclamation ill flow leave feedback!!!

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its easy to see im the illest emcee in the streets// to dope for the industry, cuz im alwayz bringin the heat//when i take out a .44 theres gonna be more dead, get a headache from wankstas//take it out, and put it in your head//rippin haters like paper, so fuck you if you hate me// face me, im ill enuff to give your dogs rabies//emcees get slain and splattered when they fuckin brains get batterd, insane ass rapper// but im the best, thats all that matters//i spit lyrical fire, spit lyrical shells galore// even if they miss you, i'll still murder you with metaphors//put several more in ya chest until you admit im the best// aint no competition, i know im better than all the rest//

theres no way you can win in a battle of you and I, matter of fact, you got a better chance of living thru suicide/ lyrical soulja, ya flows are sober and dead/ my words are a mighty river, that "flows over your head"/ my blows to ya head strike harder than white lightning, im frightening, with unique skillz that are actually worth biting/ but dont try me, or ya talent gets crashed like trade centers/ shoot ya so fast ya heads rotatin faster than plates spinnin/ so listen, close and i wont have to mention again, the danger of testin ya weak ass flows against the prince/ of rappin that is, so dont get it twisted at all/ cuz if you get hurt fuckin wit me, then homie, you are at fault/

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Old 02-09-04, 06:12 PM   #2
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I stoped reading after first few bars..your structure made it diffcult to read...peace..
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Old 02-10-04, 05:04 PM   #3
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aight pen thanx homie
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Old 07-30-04, 09:07 AM   #4
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well what can i say but welcome aboard. I mean like you do need some improvement but dont we all. keep working hard and continue doing your thing shorty.
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Old 07-30-04, 09:18 AM   #5
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..all self glorification
and structure fucked........
dint bother readin it coz of that
fix it.
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Old 07-30-04, 09:23 AM   #6
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yeah me too....
didnt even get onto the 3rd line
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Old 07-31-04, 12:45 AM   #7
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i think da problem wit peeps like riff raff n manipulation is u cant read for shit yea da structure didnt go rite in da beginin but as u get 2 da second paragraph he really comes out n self glorification dis comin from a bitch so desperate she gotta suck dick 4 battle votes cuz all no deep doen u choke artist biitch n e ways good drop work on da structure kid n welcom 2 d team fuck des mark ass bitch made hataz fo real 1 luv peace out n holla back
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Old 08-02-04, 04:40 PM   #8
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damn i wrote this shit bout a year ago.....yall say whatever ya want i no its fucked up as hell
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Old 08-02-04, 05:22 PM   #9
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repost it n revamp"rewrite it" with better structure....cause its too hard ta read like that n get da flow...pc
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