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04-20-03, 07:01 PM | #1 | ||||||
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battle type verse
IP: EB7F 19E1
like a new fruit i'm fresh in this
try to step to this and i'll twist ya neck like that chick from the excurcist i'll wreck this shit like i dont have a designated driver i'm tighter, try to attack Lunk but ya miss like a hesitatin sniper my saliva attacks heads like a piledriva say you better than me? well i dont like those kind of liars now watch as the mastermind sacrifices anyone who lacks the rhymes then crack ya spine like a cyropractor and ask ya if ya back is fine see i'm spiritually intact and i've been lyrically enhanced i'm the realest while yall is fake like silicone implants... if you read, plz reply |
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04-20-03, 07:15 PM | #2 | |||
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IP: 3273 E58A
The flow is real good, easy to catch::::::;;
However the punches aint that hard....if its a battle verse you should spend most of your energy on clownin your opponent, not talking about yaself..... Other than that it has potential, so keep it up |
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04-20-03, 08:36 PM | #3 | ||||||
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IP: 4577 CD9A
i liked it
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04-20-03, 10:53 PM | #4 | |||||||
.BeTteR ThAn YoO!.
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IP: 2D42 57B6
Thats good man, short but sweet, if you added some hard hitting punches with that in a battle it'd be tops...
Peace Out Yo!!!!
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04-21-03, 12:34 AM | #5 | ||||||
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IP: EB7F 19E1
ya, it was for kapones lil thing of rapbattles battle verses or somethin. also, i didn't wanna use some really good punches on nobody na mean? but thanks for the feedback so far
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04-21-03, 02:41 AM | #6 | ||||||
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IP: EB7F 19E1
uppin
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04-21-03, 08:35 AM | #7 | ||||||
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IP: 9E97 00AB
lunk punches r the heart of it all wit out em ull lose use as little fillers as possible concentrate on punches n personality
100.. still good verse all in all |
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04-21-03, 09:00 AM | #8 | ||||||
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IP: 4D18 261C
yer the shit was aiight lunk,was too short but!wanna see more cat,more!,i can see that lil spit building its self up slowly to the poin twhere the line ends with liars,then exploding out real fast with a tight ass battle beat going,itd be crazy if you kept the flow up...
nice bismillah |
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04-21-03, 12:40 PM | #9 | ||||||
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IP: 80DC 53D9
Mad Props kid, flow was tight, great vocab, short but Off The Meat Rack
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04-21-03, 01:00 PM | #10 | ||||||
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IP: A0C3 52BD
i hate to repeat everyone elses shyt but yea yur punches is whuts gonna do it for yu, keep rhymin tho.
you really was almost on to somthing wit that exercist line. next time try somethin like: flow circles around yur shyt/ make yur head spin like dat exercist chick/ i dont kno dawg jus bullshitten keep it up. |
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04-21-03, 11:31 PM | #11 | ||||||
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IP: EB7F 19E1
thanks for the feedback ppl!!
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04-21-03, 11:42 PM | #12 | ||||||
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IP: 4577 CD9A
that shit was tight dawg i see potential in you
ay yo can you give me feedback on my verse "i lost my mind part 1,2, and 3" |
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04-22-03, 02:52 PM | #13 | ||||||
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nice
IP: C116 B7AD
Good shit doggy.
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04-22-03, 03:08 PM | #14 | ||||||
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IP: A704 ACA3
i dont think this was very good at all. iv been doin this for a long time (ignor the # of posts) and ive probably seen this verse re done 100 times. If your not going to punch hard then why punch at all? If your not going to put out your best effort everytime then why waste the space on the board. You have potential but you will have to break away from every other "mad rappin text battler" before you will get props from me.
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