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06-12-05, 01:45 PM | #1 | |||
Do Re Mi
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this is hip-hop
IP: F974 6254
wanna start it? must be retarded
fill ya chest wit particles, leave ya heavy hearted emotions departed, potions i farted to delete tha least, atleast, slaughter like a butcher when i push ya to edge wit tha sledge make ya dance like hammer before i slam ya with tha steel, ya feel it, its real cant conceal ya wounds, open like tombs, in tha thriller video hadda kill a ho, got caught cheatin, askin whats tha dillio? so i said really tho............. and bust thru tha basement door to my replacement whore, make a statement raw so you can smell tha beef, and tell ya teeth that they soon to make room, deseace ya lease null nd void, cease ya peace, paranoid lookin ova ya shoulda, chills gettin colda when i send ya ass to north dakota shook up like a soda, explode like bomb atoms and shit, nuclear hit, causin deformation of transportation, leave ya legs twisted cuz im the wickedest, sick-at-this so fresh, cant touch my shit witta stick little bit of humor, i wrote this in school cuz i got bored, so dont be hatin lol
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06-12-05, 01:46 PM | #2 | ||||
I Got Money In Tha Bank
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IP: 22C6 2F1A
hahahaha you fart potions too??...wow *sigh of relief* thank god im not tha only 1
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06-12-05, 01:48 PM | #3 | |||
Do Re Mi
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IP: F974 6254
haha.. you know it kid.. *farts magic* haha
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06-12-05, 01:51 PM | #4 | ||||
I Got Money In Tha Bank
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IP: 22C6 2F1A
lmao...no doubt
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06-12-05, 02:31 PM | #5 | |||||||
.The Dark Knight Returns.
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IP: 8355 3BDA
hmm...i dont really kno wut to say about this piece...it didnt really make n e sense...ur wordplay was weak...and ur vocab too...u need to work on structure...the rhyme scheme in ur first six lines was fucked, seriously...this verse had no topic...it was just blah...so i cant really give u feed about that...u need to open ur mind up...and think of shit to talk about besides wut ur talkin about now...pretty weak overall...3/10
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06-12-05, 02:44 PM | #6 | |||
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IP: F974 6254
i know it doesnt make sense i jus wrote it down real quick on a little peice of paper i found lol its jus a random piece i felt like showin yall
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06-12-05, 02:47 PM | #7 | ||||
Banned: Cheating
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IP: 5386 BAC6
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Well why didn't u fix it up for it to make sence and then post it? |
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06-12-05, 03:27 PM | #8 | |||
Do Re Mi
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IP: F974 6254
cuz its not a real rhyme i ever plan on using.... its jus a little thing wit some multies in it, plus i think its kinda funny.. nd on the structure i know its fucked, its mean to be rapped in one continuous flow, so structure is not necasary
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06-12-05, 05:17 PM | #9 | |||
Do Re Mi
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