vv I'm waiting for Jesus to appear. vv
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post3178203
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post3178204

I don't feel your shit//
Look how real I get//
I stay sick like all those Third World African kids//
You can talk all you want about ki's, bread and infared//
But you just look like a kid screamin "Anarachy!" and lightin a ciggerrette//
I'll leave your body in No Where until they call a Who Dunnit//
And 90% of rappers out make me a new-born, sick to the stomach//
I'll place my flag on the tip-top of Hip-Hop Mountain's summit//
And watch the rest of you try to reach it and plummet//
You've tried to merk me in the past, but that didn't work//
You just turned all my dickriders into little young turks//
RV kinda reminds me of Kevin Smith in Clerks//
Barley any of us left// and we swear we're of the highest intellect.

bleh...........


^this is what he means. lmfao.

Very good. Great rhyme scheme, just one quick question:

what are the //'s for?

^^^^^ (/) That Is USed TA Show Where The Line Ends

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Envied Thoughtz

Phenom~~SkepTik~~42-Keyz

TrYoUt ThReAd^^^^^

Nice Drop, Could Vocab, Nice WordPlay, OverAll Nice MAyne 8/10

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Envied Thoughtz

Phenom~~SkepTik~~42-Keyz

TrYoUt ThReAd^^^^^

Thanks, both of you.

for a keystyle, pretty str8 a lil basic but u got ur point across, i liked the flow on here, it left room for me to play with if i were to say it in audio, attempts at multis here and there.....but for a key pretty decent stay focused

not bad it was a little off to me....but this was off the top so keep doing what u do....id like to see a little more punches...~1~

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Alright, I'll try doin more punches.