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09-15-05, 02:34 AM | #1 | |||||
The Topical Juggernaut
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Death's Lust
IP: D35B 3F85
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Death's Lust And as the night screams, and the light weens..
This young mans dreams erupt into a fight scene And as the moon cries to distract eye's.. His hand lets loose as three or more knives fly But he cant sway at all or let his mind fade Needs to consentrate to lower the crime rate So he snaps back to set traps on track's back As he maintains process and prepares & acts glad Infact he's sad but would never admit it at all Just as soon walk himself right through a brick wall Percistance and chance swell to dance in romance As he catches the train's prance in one quick glance And as the smoke crests and all the billows smolder His heart grows colder cos' he knows its all over Rage fills and spills on hills crimson with blood As he remembers the thrills from kills soiled in mud Snapping back to reality the formality all dies As the rumbling train echo's in night's dark sky.. Rolling over; nearly consumed by the freights weight He escapes fate & waits till he's filled w/ straight hate His murderous methods beckon the very second.. Electricity's tweekin his brain waves.. He might be insane and deranged.. But he still remains, cold and unchanged. This topical is about a man bent between killing himself and living to kill..
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09-15-05, 02:44 AM | #2 | ||||||
Whys That?
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IP: 5285 DC82
get rid of things at the start of your bars like.........
and but his he and replace them with actions..creates more imagery |
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09-15-05, 02:53 AM | #3 | |||||
The Topical Juggernaut
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IP: D35B 3F85
Good lookin, never heard anything like that before, thanks.
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Crhyme Sindicate The unexamined life is not worth living.
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09-15-05, 03:05 AM | #4 | ||||||
Whys That?
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IP: 5285 DC82
no worries bro,
just an example.. rightously the smoke crests and all the billows smolder blackening heart grows colder cos' he knows its all over Rage fills and spills on hills crimson with blood distraught mind remembers the thrills from kills soiled in mud |
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