kinda keystyled dis just wanted 2 try sumthin new if yall dont like it I'll go back 2 da original
but dis is like da same exact style as my 1st joint "holla at cha boi"


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Remember our Love ( Full Rap ) - High Class
At the swimming pool...[Keystyle] - PaYce
It's Her N Me. . - FormulaMC

(Verse 1)
this nigga is kinda lookin beyond those bad times in life
Good Ol Dayz are coming no mo mad rhymes no knief
no mo yelling & no mo Brutal punches to a nigga's face
now its just plans and taking lunches in different places
1 little brother that looks up to me & hataz that mug me
a Christian Mother thats dumb but caring who bugs me
may not have cute eyez, but to tha ladies I bring smiles
tha next day I see these bamma niggaz rockin my style
but never rocking it as better as Young J did yesterday
dont wanna go outside cold weather dont like my way
to many bammaz and to many new people so its a no
niggaz ask for a Blind Date 2 cuz I'm cool with tha hos
I see a Young N' Beautiful lady that I'm trying to get wit
but a nigga'z shyness & highness makes a nigga quit
my Pimp Juice aint no longer wet its feelin its dryness
on summer vacation in da desert absorbin food minus
a lot of people who I loved that walked in and out of me
Jasmine H. who changed me from a bitch nigga to a G
I was once lost and saw strangers but now we're cool
I see my favorite cuzin as a comedian actin like a fool
and her twin going far wit her smooth and deep poetry
A Past Memory...this phatty gurl that tried to go wit me
so I denied it so I saw her staring at me right after that
I'll only shut my eyez foreva if tha tha big man chooses
but for now wit my high elevation 4 me theres no loses
Eyez of a Young Nigga

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Holla at cha Boi
Watch Me
Eyez of a Young Nigga

That is some hot ass shit captain. Structure was good and the wordplay was emaculate. keep up that good shit and i don't know what ya other style is but u should stick wit dat shit

Holla At Em

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slept on battle
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=105181
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=113861

yeah this was alright i thought....your structure in this was good....the flow was alright, it stayed on through out the piece i thought, didnt really get off.....you had some alright vocab....but overall this was alright....and keep at it.

thanx uppin!

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BEST OF YJ
Holla at cha Boi
Watch Me
Eyez of a Young Nigga

uppin still

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BEST OF YJ
Holla at cha Boi
Watch Me
Eyez of a Young Nigga

lol had a little mistake but uppin come on yall

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BEST OF YJ
Holla at cha Boi
Watch Me
Eyez of a Young Nigga

Pretty good piece, the structure and the flow was on point very well, some okie vocab and some nice details good work man keep it up

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Open Mics
The Weathers Art
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=108673
My Teenage Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=104850
Secluded
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...851#post1148851
Open Your Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...461#post1157461

Flow Was On-Point. . Much Props For That, Made For An Easy Read. . Nice Content, Vocab Was Good, Jus Everything Was Good Man. . Tryin' Not To Be Repetitive. . Keep Um Droppin'.

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thanx
uppin

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BEST OF YJ
Holla at cha Boi
Watch Me
Eyez of a Young Nigga

good flow and multis n shit man.. this renminded me of tupacs styule on the real u must be feelin em... really ncie job here man keep that shit up.. peace

holla

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Sonz Of Enlightenment

thanx uppin

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BEST OF YJ
Holla at cha Boi
Watch Me
Eyez of a Young Nigga

sleep!

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BEST OF YJ
Holla at cha Boi
Watch Me
Eyez of a Young Nigga

damn dis is on da 2nd page?

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BEST OF YJ
Holla at cha Boi
Watch Me
Eyez of a Young Nigga