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That's Right...I'm White
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The World Today (feat MP~PHASIZ)
IP: 14B4 F2C3
If yall wanna hear the beat to this song.... it's here
http://www.soundclick.com/bands/4/opeymusic.htm it's the slow beat(rough draft) Krem's Verse (Piano Starts) Talking Damn man, what's up with all this beef it's like....no one cares no more about people and how they live man....we need to try and atleast to give lets try to make the world a better place for the future generation to live lets just stop all this war shit and just....live in peace or is that even possible who knows...... all we can do is to just keep.... prayin.... (Beat Start's) Rapping ever since the day i was born and brought into this world i knew that one of these day's things would unfurl since the age of one to the age of eighteen nuclear threats and wars like i ain't ever seen i wonder why we can't all chill and just be friends before the last bomb drops, and the world ends it's like no matter what we do or where we go people tryin to control the world, with their power and dough kamikaze bombers committing suicide just for their pride just think bout how their loved ones felt inside soldiers risking their lives so we can live in peace turn on the tv, watchin the terrorist level increase makes me feel a little worried when that shit goes up it's like sitting here waiting for an attack...fuck but atleast we caught hussien in his little hole in jail for life, with no chance of parole that makes me feel a little safer in the world today maybe i'll live a full life, not gon be blown away i don't wanna see anymore people in sorrow but who knows, maybe a bomb drop tomorrow the world today is just to damn hard to predict someday we'll live in peace...without conflicts MP~PHASIZ Verse Life is like war and we're livin' in the battlegrounds What creeps in the shadows has me scared to look around Terrorists droppin' bombs like a meteor shower Fallin' to earth at a hundred miles per hour Families scurry about in search for somethin' to eat What was once their homes is now rubble in the street Lookin' at the children you can see death in their eyes Parents mourn over their bodies as they say their goodbyes Don't accept the truth so I refuse to believe my eyes While the guilty walk among us hidden in disguise Calculate the deaths and injuries to figure out the sum It's like a livin' nightmare that you can't wake up from The stress of war threats have people killin' theirself Earth is becomin' a growin' gravesite within itself I fear just to hear every tick-tock of the clock Cause I know at the same time there's a reload of a glock The cops and F.B.I. claim they have this case on lock And at the same time they're outlinin' bodies in chalk This situation's not bein' handled it's bein' untouched It's so far out of reach we have no grasp or clutch We're all regretably waitin' to experience such a crime And till it finally happens is just a matter of time......... Oh.....and i would like to thank ...Opey... for letting me use one of his beats, thanks alot man Drop some feedback on this please peace Last edited by Krem : 01-15-04 at 10:42 PM. |
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That's Right...I'm White
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IP: A5E0 A6A4
come on now......don't sleep on this
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Middle Weight
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IP: 4013 53EF
k krem i was really feelin your verse u have elivated HEAPS, other cats verse was also good
i wonder why we can't all chill and just be friends before the last bomb drops, and the world ends ^that was real simple but dope U have a simple ryme scheme but it is still dope, Keep spittin and we might be able to hook up for a collab inm future
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IP: E3CE A36D
nice drop.. couldnt really listen to the beat seems as how im at school and i aint got any speakers... but ima check it when i get home... that way i can give you a better reply. But in reality this was pretty solid nice concept decent imagery keep droppin...
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That's Right...I'm White
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IP: 4600 51E6
come on don't sleep on this, this is the first piece i actually worked on, drop some feedback please
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That's Right...I'm White
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IP: A0D2 5C87
come on ya'll , stop sleeping on this
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IP: 68B3 CE04
This was a good flow.
after reading it in my head to the beat, each line of the song was a good length to fit the beat of the tune. nice drop, good 1 Krem keep it up Laterzzz
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I Used To Pray
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IP: 4577 CD9A
yeah man this was dope, nice flow throughout the whole thing like the other guy said its simple rhyming but it turned out decent, good verses from both of you, 1 thing to work on i guess is vocab, peace
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A King Missing a Queen...
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IP: 8D7B 43DF
it's like no matter what we do or where we go
people tryin to control the world, with their money and dough ^ Isnt money and dough the same thing? currect me if im wrong ^ I thought you had a good topic. It was a simple write, but you still added a nice feel to it. Both of you did, by putting in your personal opinions on it. I respect that. You had alright vocab, maybe work on that a little bit. Structure, just legnthen the lines. It was an over all average rap, but I liked the feel of it. Nice drop hommies... Keep elevating... ( PLEASE RETURN THE FAVOR AND PEEP THE OPEN MIC IN MY SIG, APPRICIATED )
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That's Right...I'm White
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IP: E7E2 6F94
oops money was spose to be power, so it would be power and dough
ah well i fixed it, thanks for pointing it out uppin |
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Flyweight
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IP: 3940 2ECC
nice way of starting your ryme and above all, it was nice to see your creativity. thats tha shit that be tight dog.
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That's Right...I'm White
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IP: A0D2 5C87
thanks yall
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IP: 4577 CD9A
Very nice...I must've missed this earlier..Both of ya had good flow thourghout the whole thing..good content and good scheme to go along with it..nice work..
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IP: 7A38 2D7B
people say you've elevated, i can't back that up because i cannot recall reading any of your other pieces, but if this was anything to go by, then i think you have talent..flow was spot on, like RTopic said, just add more complex vocab, and you'll have elevated a whole lot more...
try not to dwell on how far you have to go, stop and look for a moment just how far you've come. |
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Flyweight
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IP: CDD4 33E5
Pretty sick drop....both verses corresponded with the topic(like they supposed to) and they both were very Hip Hop conscious verses...and whoever said it needed more complex vocab, no it doesnt, thats not its purpose. Very nice drop boys.
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