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01-03-04, 12:44 PM
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Family ISH
IP: 1617 F1D2
You say you love me
But I don’t listen Ripping Shit off the walls Not living at all You say you care But I know you don’t I can read you I don’t need you I’ll leave you In the dust But I must Stay Mom needs me I am her She is me We need each other I love her But you don’t love her You say you do But you lie Stay up nights On the computer In internet chat rooms Acting Like a single man Cheater Why do you deceive her I’m eager To attack But my cool I must keep Fuck staying silent My mind I must speak |
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01-04-04, 03:39 AM
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IP: 7D27 BE32
nice replies...lol...jumpin jacks
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01-18-04, 01:18 AM
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tHa OnE FeMaLe*
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IP: 8B9D F815
that was really deep..i liked it alot. alot of emotion and good imagery. keep it up
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Crazy spit, her shyt be emaculate...oNe |
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01-18-04, 10:10 AM
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IP: 4577 CD9A
nice peice....... you didnt rhyme all the way through but that just makes it more interestin 2 keep read in......return tha fava n read mine!!!!!! keep it up!
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01-25-04, 03:02 PM
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Sharp Perfection.
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IP: 4427 B15C
a piece written from pure emotion i'd say, not focusing really on vocab or flow, just emotion and you thoughts. it was written simple, and got your thoughts across. its a piece you can take and expand, build on top of.
~Tera~ DONT HATE
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R.I.P to my lost girl
~ Nyla ~ keep singing in heaven |
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