Topic: Hell In Heaven's Presence

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Hell In heaven's Presence

I walked Jacob's Staircase, Angels Faces Bent
The Twisted Vent, Evil in their Heavenly Scent
They looked upon me, Eyes shifting Suddenly
They thought I was hear to create Havoc, Arguably
I walked in front of them, Mocking their own Mocks
And as i walked, I felt Heavenly Nirvana in all Shock
The Embers firing from my Image, Burning in Place
The Mistake, Climbing Israel's Ladder, In his Place
The Jealousy and Envy That I walked to Represent
To Repent, the sins I committed, Of my Intent
Face to Face with My Enemies Creator, My Hate
Wouldn't let me Escape, With My Own Mistakes...
But Fate, Lead Me on, to the Opening of Peters Gate
The Hate in My eyes, Greeted the Love in His
I realized, That He loved Me Still, He Knew of This
The Alpha, The Omega, The Beginning And The End
Either Way I knew My Fate, I don't need to Pretend
This Feeling, We know Opposites Still Attract
Accident In My Mind...
Can't Keep My Train Of Thought Intact
Yes.. How He bungles My Mind, I'm Still Shitless
Sepents decieve, I have to follow My Instinct
I was the Hell in Heaven's Presence In the Above
The Apocalypse was Over...
The Devil Committed Suicide, walking into Gods Love

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Nice battle guys...

Skiddz: Imagery was good, couldve gone a bit further, You had a pretty consistent set of voice and an overall nice piece. Some parts couldve had some fixing on because in some parts you got off topic, but all in all, it was a nice piece.

Auspicious: Just as i would expect, you had a very nice piece. Your piece's perspective was different from Skiddz, and thats definately a plus, because usually when you go second, you might have stolen some ideas from your opponent and you might not have known but that clearly didnt happen. Great imagery and a consistent set of voice. You were on topic and your piece was good enough to take this match.

Vote-Auspicious

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A vote? for the love of god.
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Nice piece both.

But I'm gonna honestly have to give this to 'Spish. I liked the approach he took better, the angle or perspective. What ever you wanna call it.

Skiddz wasnt really getting at the topic and went off a few times. But other than that, both were good.

Vote-Auspicious.

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Dope shit...
Both came incredibly Good
Both had good flow...
Auspicious had nice multies
And imagery... Good vocabulary
SkiddZ came dope also
But his imagery wasn't as good as
Auspicous's....
Imma go with Auspicious on this one
His was a bit more creative also...

Vote-Auspicious

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some fucking ill shit here,, both came good with good vocab flow was on point......
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Skiddz is a better topical write then a battle and this prove its,, i also think the same with auspicious... i was juss about to vote but remembered i am in the same crew as skiddz,,, well done to both then.,. i wont sway by saying who i was going to vote for but good luck to you both

alright...

Skiddz; decent verse seemed like you really wanted to make this enchanting with your imagery and use of analogies....My personal opinion is that you put effort in it, but not as much came out of it...seemed like you tried really hard to compete with Aus...
Your ending really threw me off with the over all structure and rhyme scheme....

Yes.. How He bungles My Mind, I'm Still Shitless
Sepents decieve, I have to follow My Instinct
I was the Hell in Heaven's Presence In the Above
The Apocalypse was Over...
The Devil Committed Suicide, walking into Gods Love

The use of slang and cursing in this ending was of poor judgement...I would have personally never used it....I feel it takes from the feeling of the piece///

Aus.....Nice piece....kept with good structure....couple times i had to reread a sentence or so but overall and easy read...I enjoyed your intro and your outro felt you really grasp'd what you were intending on writing for this topic...nice work man

Vote= Aus

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