alrite dis is me 1st rap
i no its probly crap

wots up wid u me nigger
wot u stupid shud of pulled da trigger
but u didnt no i was fukin ur whore
fort u wud of herd her beggin n screemin 4 more
see look now ur on da pill
all because u missed 1 kill

most of ya neva herd my shit
o well duz it look as if im carin just a tiny bit
take da piss ill shoot da shit out of u
thn get ur mom 2 eat da fukin shit right out of u
this song is not about u
just 1 silly little rap
but dont worry there will be more dan that

needs more work on vocab and structure but good flow

o well ill get betta

yup throw some creativity in tha thang.Most people sound simplistic their first time (except for me i came out the womb ill i was battling the other sperm for survival)

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You Needa Work On Everything, But You Gotta Start Somewhere...You Need To Have Creativity And Flow, You Had None WhatSoEver. Lengthen Your LInes, But Dont Have Them Strechted!!!!

Overall- 2/10, Dont Worry, You'll Get Better....I Think..

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