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Old 01-25-04, 02:50 AM   #1
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...sometimes it's easier trying, than to face the worst
cause there's always another dying man to replace the first
but his boots do not thirst, another will come to fill them
just another lonely pilgrim standing in the blood of children
lost in the flood, we will them onwards to defeat
contributing propaganda thorugh the kind words of deceit
just a mine or piece of meat? either would will you on
wondering what pill you're on, realizing, still, you're wrong
to believe in a God that blesses a place as evil as this
receive tins of fraud, confessions to deceive the wits
of the young men who keep coming in an endless stream
but we hung them out to dry, or die to defend the seem-
ingly useless civilization on the other side of the globe
say "Hi!" to your folks, cause you're the light of the show
..."whats that?" you strut back to front lines of existence
orders rumbling with insistence to crush ties of resistance

...and it all goes quiet, you can deny it all you want
officials sign a treaty; what of this place we call the front?

the war is over now, and i think we lost cause
noone will fight for a world thats already hostage

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Old 01-25-04, 05:37 AM   #2
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quite an expressive drop... a good strong bar to open it up... and pretty consistant thru... liked the way you set to finish it, but thought the wording was a bit off... other than that.. tight....
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Old 01-25-04, 07:03 AM   #3
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i liked it a lot it was very good...........................
dope use of word manipulation...........................good job.......
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Old 01-25-04, 05:29 PM   #4
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Old 01-25-04, 05:39 PM   #5
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Yo good drop.....very deep!!! i like the feeling and emotion put into it.......respect..........Hit me up!

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Old 01-25-04, 06:02 PM   #6
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I liked this piece alot like Eleete said its very deep i give it a 9.5/10
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Old 01-25-04, 06:50 PM   #7
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..very emotional drop..I don't know what you were feeling at the time but I can see you put lot of emotions into this..great imagery(as ways)..simply a dope piece..
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Old 01-25-04, 09:23 PM   #8
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Good drop Maven...Very good imaginary in this and you thoroughly expressed your point(Tho, I am lacking that knowledge)...Good wordplay on this and you were consistent with good lines through out...7.5/10 drop

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Old 01-25-04, 10:44 PM   #9
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yep ... like every one else this was a very nice piece.. start to end... but your BEAT PEICE EVER... but hey... its among the ranks... good drop dunny...

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Old 01-25-04, 11:57 PM   #10
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Man that was a really deep piece. I've been wanting to express those kinds of thoughts for awhile now but couldn't put them into something like that, sorry that I can't really give you any ideas to improve on but I really liked it. Hope you can give me some words of advice on some of my stuff.
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