If the eyes are the window to the soul then my window leaks/
The frame is rotted and the pain has streaks/
The leaking liquid running down my face/
Falling into the tissue guttering i need to replace/
If these tears could talk they'd tell the tales/
Tell the tales where my mouth fails/
No noise is made jus this leakin water/
If noise is made im for the slaughter/
Please don't tell anyone, this can be our little secret/
Under the carpet we will sweep it/

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Please give us ur comments and ne constructive criticism is much apreciated as this is my first open mic

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reply plz

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People are lookin but no replys c'mon

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Good verse son. if u can drop like that u hav gota call sum body out 4a battle.if u hav stuff like that u'll do well!

nicely done....keep the flow a little bit mor consistent and give it some more lines and you have got yourself some dope shit right there...6.5/10

Yeah i agree this was a nice short little piece here.....i liked it though.....i liked the first line "If the eyes are the window to the soul then my window leaks" <-nice....structure could be a bit better....you had some good emotion in this, liked that...overalla nice piece...keep at it.

Thanx ne more

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..decent short little piece..few good lines...good flow and content..and start replying to others...peace...

Yeah, u got some gd stuff keep it up.

Yeah im likein that verse, ya have got some good punch lines keep it goin!

Yo dawg that would make a sick Chorus ina song, no doubt!! Shit is good short verse.....hit me up sometime....Peace

Thanx ne more

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Thanx ne more

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