The hue's of the skies blue
Loomed in my view
Clouds were melted by the sun
and my happiness grew

an an amethyst flew,past the trees
the air so quiet
i heard a bumble bee sneeze
while lungs of pristine were breathed
nature conducted a breeze

and i was entrusted to see,and listen
as blades of blunt grass glistened
dancing till lost in their rhythm
i smiled at this moving picture
and clutched at the prison
that i can't get get in...

You see i'm old and hurt now
i'm told the earths foul
natures gardens poisoned black
and it sickens mind and bowel

and it sounds, like the face of death
a place you struggle for breath
grey and horribly bleak
and 'greeds' the colorists theft

The trouble is left, no one cares
trees are leafless and bare
once beautiful plants are scared
to show their true colors

as nothing is spared, the skies been stained
the suns lost its reign
pollution smothers its warmth
and the rays no longer play

now sombre shades, cloud that garden
which my memories are guardin
reminiscing made me smile
but dissapears between the margins

A place where arson, has burnt my eyes
My vision has died
So i'm thankful
that for 40 years i've been blind...

upping

gay..
a reply please

LoL...
Nice piece Fgee..
Nice and short lines
Good flow...
Showed imagery...
Props....

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Yea !! this was nice, good sheme i liked the reading flow very nice, .. very good flow, the content here was nice, good story telling my friend..very nice .. vocab was on point, & good.. enjoyed this mate, .. its being slept on why!!!!? UpppppERRRRR>

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Fuck you

It wa str8 ..keep it up dude!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!Holla at me

Post shitty replys like this again & you are banned a week from Om.
-Eddy

Castro Xl...
congratulations
u have officially entered RB's gay reply hall of fame

freeman...
it wasnt complex but i liked the imagery of it and the change of the picture.
not perhaps the best piece i've done but it was more experimental than anything

this was very nice...I liked how kept everything so simple..it made it very easy to follow..^that was my favorite line..very simple line,yet very true...this had a great content along with great imagery..very nice...~~

I liked the flow on this, I thought that was a major aspect of this being a good pieec, the content was something to be questioned though, I was feeling the depth and personal meaning in this, it lacked any good wording though, but the piece was carried out with good lyrics, i spose i mean the wording could be improved, but the flow was def, got me vibing along to text, O_o

Pz.

nice drop dog, i been waiting for something like that to appear in this sessionl.

Too nice. I really like this one, it had imagery, a flow to it, stayed on topic, it was well worded, and i can feel it. i see the same thing everyday, and i'm glad i can still be blind at times. Thanks

uper