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02-11-04, 05:34 PM | #1 | ||||
shawty"B"
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Where I Go
IP: 4577 CD9A
On a lake in the middle of the sea
thats where i go so no one can find me on a peice of paper on a pad of pages i share with myself the many stages the stages that the scenes are set some stages hold my biggest regret other stages hold the scene of a fantasy of a dream a dream of hope a dream of fears a dream of laughter a dream of tears on a lake in the middle of the sea thats were i go so no one can find me
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02-11-04, 06:45 PM | #2 | |||||||
Middle Weight
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wow, great imagery. the scenic part of ure poem is what stood out the most to me. also the feeling of loneliness, but a good kind. not a strong rhyme scheme but it was short, so it didnt bother me too much. good poem overall. well it depends, if it was written fast, then good, if it took you more than a day, then i think you should have made it a lil more complex.
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02-12-04, 04:15 PM | #3 | ||||
shawty"B"
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it was a 3 minit kinda poem
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