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03-21-04, 04:36 AM | #1 | |||||
Youngin jus call me Young
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ma second so gimme a break but b honest
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i pack no weapons niggaz but ima souljah cuz tha way i spit,words gon b colda its ma second freesyle so gimme a break i surprised tha unreal niggaz who thought i wuz fake i cared for a minute who saw wut i did now i jus go wit tha flo,kinda ad lib spit as i go some niggaz mite neva kno spit leads to emotional gro i admit i ain't got tha best flo but then again that's wut i'm doin this fo i spit fa tha niggaz that can't talk niggaz i run fa tha ppl that can't walk i keep it goin till tha mournin and i neva stop bringin back old wit new like "POP AND LOCK" naw i ain't gon grab ma glock i leave em on tha shelf cuz that's last resort cuz its not too good fa ya health keep ma rhymes on tha low spit in tha mode of stealth honest replies |
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03-21-04, 05:22 AM | #2 | ||||
....Trunks R 4 Bodies....
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it was al right for a right off the head freestyle
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03-21-04, 11:03 AM | #3 | ||||
yawn
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pack no weapons niggaz but ima souljah
cuz tha way i spit,words gon b colda Alright, bucould've worded it different. its ma second freesyle so gimme a break i surprised tha unreal niggaz who thought i wuz fake Not really needed, but was iight. Could've taken out unreal and it would've had better flow. i cared for a minute who saw wut i did now i jus go wit tha flo,kinda ad lib the second line made the flow choppy. spit as i go some niggaz mite neva kno spit leads to emotional gro i admit i ain't got tha best flo but then again that's wut i'm doin this fo I'm picky, I don't like 4 word lines ;(. Good lines , just lost wyour flow again. i spit fa tha niggaz that can't talk niggaz i run fa tha ppl that can't walk good emotiona stuff. Had good flow, and i guess a good message. i keep it goin till tha mournin and i neva stop bringin back old wit new like "POP AND LOCK" Good flow. Liked these lines naw i ain't gon grab ma glock, i leave em on tha shelf cuz that's last resort cuz its not good fa ya health keep ma rhymes on tha low and in tha mode of stealth Would've been better like this ^. Last line wasn't good ender. But it was iight Overall. It was an iight freestyle. It was easier to judge then the other one because of the length and topic. i think you had 1 meta, ok flow overall, the rest you were missin. Work on Vocab, try and fit multies and punches in too. 4/10
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03-21-04, 04:41 PM | #4 | |||||||
Flyweight
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it wuz aiight for ya 2nd but keep doin whay u do
and elevation will come e-z |
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