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Old 03-21-04, 02:11 AM   #1
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Youngin jus call me Young
 
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From: that Austin Tex 512 reppin Kileen to tha fullest
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MA FRIEND

ma best friend died i feel no pain
i don't kno if i'll go crazy,if i wil go insane
i don't understand no crying no tears
even tho this event fufilled ma worst fears
i have no idea y life has treated me this way
i don't kno to live or die goin on from this day
i am not a soldier who wuz built to have no feelings
i feel closed up inside like a steel house wit steel ceilings
i don't kno if this is tha way i spose to feel
i mean sad but happy like a jus signed a deal
i spose i don't feel quite sure of maself
i wonder if ur dad died how u wud have felt


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Old 03-21-04, 02:19 AM   #2
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is that a true story?????????????????????????????????????????
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Old 03-21-04, 02:25 AM   #3
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aye Young was that supposed t be a freestyle or poetry. because if it was a freestyle you shouldve picked a dfferent topic. but it was hot as hell if it was poetry. Just work on ya grammer and ya structure
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Old 03-21-04, 02:45 AM   #4
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yo I feel you dog if that was a true story
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Old 03-21-04, 03:56 AM   #5
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not tru..don't kno if fuckin poetry or freestyle..lol..jus wrote..sorry if not freestyle...
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Old 03-21-04, 04:09 AM   #6
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I felt that.
Keep rhymin nigga.
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Old 03-21-04, 10:50 AM   #7
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Pretty good. Could've been freestyle or poetry. Very deep stuff, though it wasn't true. This topic isn't really something to judge, so i'm just going to say it was iight. Flow was a little off, besides that its ok.
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Old 03-25-04, 12:21 PM   #8
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uhmm it was real....ummm....well..it was just real. Keep writing and El a vayte!


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Old 03-25-04, 02:04 PM   #9
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that was chill, keep rappin
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Old 03-25-04, 06:47 PM   #10
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Nice shit dude. Coulda used a little more flow, but I liked it alot.

Sorry for ya too. Shit happens =/

Keep droppin' bro.

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Old 03-25-04, 09:44 PM   #11
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annoucement i'm a gurl..lol..its coo zerosum...oh AND REP NC ma nicca
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Old 03-25-04, 09:44 PM   #12
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Nice start. Nice Topic. Yeah, could have made it more "Freestyle" oriented. I like the topic... Its no cool to post a battle rap...
Cmon girl. Run the shit through Microsoft word...It looks herbish with spelling mistakes and punctuation errors!
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Old 03-25-04, 09:48 PM   #13
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that shit waz tite ssome deep ass shit shoulda kept goin an made it longer though

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