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The Tragic
IP: 6AD2 8F43
Speaking My life was changed on this sad day, open your ears and listen to what i have to say Early hours in September, was the start of the downfall I was a sleep in bed, when I had a sudden phonecall It was my homies mum on the end, upset and cryin Saying my boy was in hospital, and slowly dieing He had a very bad car crash, after a night on the beer Leaving me, the rest of his friends and family all in fear I dropped my phone, I couldn’t believe what had happened My homeboy was placed the victim of a horrific car accident What upset me most, was that I thought I broken a sin Because my boy called me early, but I said ‘im staying in’ I was shattered for weeks, as I was unable to see him Only hearing updates, making sure that he was still breathing There were many moments when his life was critical I was hearing news, saying his health was looking really dull Every night, didn’t sleep, all this happening week after week Then the truth was out, police told his family at his bed That he was the passenger in the car, so someone left him for dead Still not able to see him, I was really getting mad Especially after hearing the truth from my boyz dad All this shit was getting bad, and it was leaving his family sad Chorus Life is short, consequences do happen Less than a thought, this got me rapping Life is short, consequences do happen Less than a thought, this got me rapping I will never forget the day, week before Christmas, 18th December Man its all up in my head, I can still remember The phone started ringing I heard my boys on the other line I heard his voice for the first time, since the crash in September He said ‘you know who this is’, ‘Jones im getting better’ I said ‘course I know who it is’ ‘how could I ever forget ya’ I actually felt happy, this feeling was a massive relief Still not able to see him, but real beliefs of hearing him speak I got to see him the very next week..boxing day night Seeing him with wires, tubes and machines gave me a fright But I stood close to him, spoke to him and held his hand tight Kept telling my boy, that everything was going to be all right Chorus Life is short, consequences do happen Less than a thought, this got me rapping Life is short, consequences do happen Less than a thought, this got me rapping The following week… my boy was at home resting Docs still keeping eyes on him by checking and testing But he was ok, he was gonna get through it Secretly for the start, I already knew this More weeks went past, and my boy was improving and awful alot He couldn’t wait to get out, see the world again for a normal spot Finally he could leave his house and we checked every place out Everyone had missed him, wherever he went he always got a shout Now hes nearly fully recovered, but I will always remember That early hour call, on the 21st of that tragic September Chorus Life is short, consequences do happen Less than a thought, this got me rapping Life is short, consequences do happen Less than a thought, this got me rapping |
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IP: 6AD2 8F43
ill get links now
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IP: 0840 D57D
yo this shit was ill but had a choppy flow. Some of the rhymes in the beginning were weak but it got better. The hook was a little simple also but other than that the shit was tite
holla back at mine I AM THE AMERICAN DREAM BLOOD, SWEAT, and TEARS
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ya numba done came// and crumbled ya fame// into a ball' a umbrulla disolves into flames// u under my REIGN//-Royce da 5'9'' why do it// knowin u can light my saliva like lighta fluid//-Royce da 5'9''
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IP: 6AD2 8F43
feedback plz
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IP: 6A2E 4C90
1 Word GGGGGGGGGGGGGGGG UNIT!!!!!!!
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IP: 6AD2 8F43
^^^ok can i get some feedback plz
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IP: DE75 C55E
[GOOD STUFF]
The subject was deep, and probably hard to write about. I enjoy reading something other than 'I'm the best rapper', so this was nice. The hook was pretty tight..simplistic, yet put the message across. [BAD STUFF] The flow was choppy almost though the whole thing. It would have been better if you had used some multis. It didn't really put a great picture in my head. But only practise can help that. Overall..it was an aiight drop..keep it up, homie. And if you have the time please leave feed on this drop: http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=121135 Peace
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