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alright...let's do it...i'll check in tomorrow...it's 3in the morning here...

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jpoll thinks he's the best, I underestemate you because your rapping is wackness/
take this shit inside you, my words are like pride, they breath down living makeing you die/
preasure amounts of blood boils that are roasting you away like in an oven as tin foil/
i'll gut you with the razor blade I just shaved my balls with lol/
can't take the heat neither the beat, it'll sweep you off your feet dealing with the faker/
this guy's a make up lover, wears red lip stick who's into glossary, trying to look like J.lo/
Plus your face looks like a fugus not the mushroom kind but the rotton kind/
You can never catch up to my league, it'll put you down and make you smoke weed/
after all jpoll an't on a role, stole his spot light, fighting him off da mic/
remember me im dynamite don't want me to light the flame and watch the spark blow up watching you blow to fragments/
your in the trunk of my car with five padlocks secureing the trunk jammin it/
hear you strugglein, leave you wid some classical music to listen, when dropping you into the bottom of the sea sinking/

alright I can tell your a newb...you need a lesson about structure...and punches...and vocab...and well...battling...

anyways here it is...your verse is the longest 5 bars i've ever seen...anyway...

yo yo yo
check this shit...

fuck he's just a rook...cherry's still intact...
needs rappin 101, the book...or come to me i teach infact...
you lack precise punches...personals...flow...and even rhymes...
battling's unknown to you like the aliens in 'signs'...
stretch lines so long i thought you wrote a novel...
i'm patton the general...and your of course that german rommel...
i kill your platoon and chase you through greece...
your flow won't be released...cause it's obviously already deceased...
i came weak...but it's straight up keystyle...this is true...
i still KO'd your shit...hit the vote dial ...not ur threw....

alright...pm..me back for advice on your verse...

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Papa doc, this wasn't your best drop normally you come harder but your punches this round were really conecting plus your flow was a bit off
Flow: 6/10
Punches: 6/10
Personals: 6/10
Metas: 5/10
Multies: 5/10
Wordplay: 5/10
Overall: 32/60

JPoll, nice flow nice punches, you used nice creativity and it shows.

Flow: 7/10
Punches: 7/10
Personals: 7/10
Metas: 7/10
Multies: 6/10
Wordplay: 6/10
Overall: 38/60
Vote:

aiight im a set this one out like da vinci did

Papa Doc:
Flow: 4/10
Punches: 5/10
Personals: 5/10
Metas: 5/10
Multies: 5/10
Wordplay: 4/10
Overall: 28/60

so u can see i thought u ddnt come that good..u need some uppin dawg. i cud tell u woz a noob.

Jpoll:
Flow: 7/10
Punches: 6/10
Personals: 6/10
Metas: 7/10
Multies: 7/10
Wordplay: 6/10
Overall: 39/60
jpoll cud have came stronger, i kno coz of his other battle but he did enough to beat popa doc.

vote = jpoll

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vote on this sucka.................................

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uppin uppin uppin uppin uppin uppin uppin uppin uppin

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ill break it down................

Papa Doc:
Flow: 4/10-woz all ova
Punches: 5/10-they were there but weak
Personals: 4/10-think 1 woz attempted
structure: 5/10-basic-hard to follow
Multies: 5/10-need more complexity
Wordplay: 6/10-not bad but not complex enough
Overall: 29/60

need 2 elevate...tell u woz a noob....up it kid.

Jpoll:
Flow: 7/10-easy to follow...above average
Punches: 7/10-ok cud b harder
Personals: 6/10-think u had 1-n it woz gud...more needed
structure: 7/10-again nice n easy to follow-effective
Multies: 7/10-sum nice rhymes-cud b more complex
Wordplay: 7/10-pretty much same as multies
Overall: 41/60
he cud cum harder but he knew what he had 2 do to win and he did...with ease on his part

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uppin for votes. j poll didn't have creativity or better multies, i think I just took dis.