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Ima tell yall about sum shit that went down last year prolly the best night of my life hear me out... (Verse) September 1st 2003/ Shit in reality jus another normal day for me/ Woke up and there was a text on my phone/ I remembered givin her my number... ...she asked if i wanted to go to her home/ She broke up wit her ex the night before last i was there to hear it/ I heard she liked me but that werent the reason... ...fact is he treated her like shit/ People could see we clicked...and there was a spark/ I couldnt believe i didnt notice her feelings... ...even when she showed me her birthmark/ It was in a particular area...but i wont say where/ Back to the story i replied back... ...sayin what time should i be there?/ She said come round about 7 my parents are going out/ I need sum company... ...and only u know what im about/ I tried callin her but she werent respondin/ She text dont call i get nervous... ...ur voice starts me gigglin/ So we text all day while the hours past/ I looked at the clock only an hour?... ...why aint the day goin fast?/ Finally 7 came i was at the door my mind constantly thinkin/ I knocked she answered come in watcha drinkin?/ I stood back amazed she dressed up for me... ...but then again we both we lookin smart/ She looked real beautiful... ...i could feel her taking my heart/ We sat in the living room and spoke as we watched sum T.V/ Then i felt her hand reach over startin to touch me/ I responded back the same my heart set on fast beats/ She pulled me over...her head on my lap in the same seats/ My hand was stroking her fine hair What Women Want was on/ I thought nows my chance please dont word it wrong/ I whispered in her ear I know what u want V/ She smiled and said what then... ...i told her u want me/ Then we kissed and our relationship was spawned/ 9 months later...our Baby Ethan was born... ...and we still going strong/
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upin this
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shieet mayun that was nyce
yo check mah open mic put sum feedback
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IP: 5867 FD83
dont come at my hammi like that (z villian)
that was hard respect, my heart came to you on that one... ...producing a baby is the only fulfilling thing that you can ever do, you take this one with a 10/10.. great solid story, good lines, flow was very nice, worplay and the closure was "strong" rep D2R to the Fullest |
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...Belong...
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IP: 4C49 64C6
Thanks a lot dawg that means a lot im uppin this again yall
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~Whos Next?~
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wow man, that shit was hot dawg... great story line and fun to read.. flow was good, real nice man i like that shit..
I stood back amazed she dressed up for me... ...but then again we both we lookin smart/ She looked real beautiful... ...i could feel her taking my heart/ nice verse right there man, real nice... that was my favorite one in it. good spit
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DaTrus Is A Bitch!
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It Was Aight..
Your Vocab and Multi/Flow Isnt All There...But You GOt The StoryLine Down...Just Need To Add The Emotion and Word Usuage To Your Advantage. Good Job Though...6.5/10 ~R~ |
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The Ups and Downs of Life
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I really feel the story to this, you can tell it really means somethin to you--- good piece here i like it.... Keep on climbin... 1
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dayumm that was nice yo
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awww..i like the way this shit was told..putting something as personal as that is alwayz interesting to read..could ov done with a bit more detail you know..shit like..getting dressed b4 going there..trying all diffrent outfits on and that..im sure u see where im cumin from..anyway it was a nice piece hope to see more from you in the future
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Banned: Cheating
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IP: 6AD2 8F43
props...postin personal shit on here,takes guts...
in woz a nice drop..... sum raw emotion,nice depth to it....gud flow n nice use of multies keep it up |
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Banned: Cheating
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IP: 6AD2 8F43
could sumone drop a vote on dis 2 plz..........
http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=135238 thanx |
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that was raw 8.5/10
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IP: 2553 ECFD
props to you for postin that, not bad either!!
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