yo peeps who think that i drink to damn much, get choked in the throat and locked in my trunk,
I maybe what you call a case of dellisiuon, but thats just i come out of my house hollerin an hootin,
I'm yellin out for anybody that dares, to snipe me out but guess what, fuck I dont care,
I'm makin people stare and stoppin and havin they jaws droppin, I'll step to a cripple and say lets get it poppin,
roll him down the street makin sure he's deceased, beat him down with the arm he lost in vietnam,
now some might think i push my lyrics to the edge, but all you have to do is staple the headphones to your head,
like the walkin dead except when i start to eat you, I'll be aware rip off your head and have you stare while i defeat you,
my type of people are those who beat ho's, cus they lost to em' at a game of dominoes,
yeah maybe i need to seek proffessional help, theres sumtin wrong wit the state of my mental health,
now before i leave heres sumtin to remember me by, mix aleve, vikeden, and ex your bound to get high.
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just sum shit i came up wit tell me what you think

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not bad but instead of running multi's like a run on sentence try rewording them better so the don't go so long...that will help your flow n structure....that last line would prolly kill ya..lol..check these out...don't vote if ya don't understand..leave feedback if ya'd like..i suggest the topical..its a good read..
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