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Check in by: 08-06-04 at 07:59 AM

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oh yea dis is a topical n the topic is A Friends Rampage

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Mc DeaTh has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-03-04 08:00 AM.

I was walkin to school when i heard some gunshots
it was my friend n his face was coverd wit blood spots
blood splattering when the shots went off his 12 guage
i thought'WHAT A STUPID FUCK!' when he started this rampage
Shooting at cars to make dem burst into flames
i was shocked because i didnt know what he became
he saw me n fired 2 shots but they missed by an inch
my mind was confusing thinkin it was a dream so i gave my arm a pinch
but it hurt he was running to me and hatred in his eyes
my whole life was in his hands still hearing peoples cries
a bullet went thru my leg and i was barly walkin
he jus smiled at me wit an evil grin without even talking
Police came shot some bullets in his chest n was down real fast
he was stopped after killing more den 200 people at last

Prodigy has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-03-04 07:10 PM.

come on man finish ur verse its taking to long....
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Shits fuck the past few days my boy’s been played
like a vampire a stake to the heart he been betrayed

Laid to rest like a flower at a funeral, been left to rot
Got beef with some next man coz his girls in his slot

So what you take my girl and you think your not getting shot!!
Hot to the touch my boy’s fuming looming contemplating a plot

Now his blood is boiling,~ and only a fight can cool his rage
War is the only thing that could compensate being left caged

The hour is drawing close a friend’s rampage is next in the tide
Do I stand with him or watch his demise, I realised not to hide

The end is in sight, Might this be my last night, My last fight?
Sighted the dude out side a 7~11 buying alcohol for the night

Reached in my pocket, the 9’s off safety, then prayed god to forgive
My head just out the sunroof~ my visions a blur we got him for sure

We let our guns bark~ moment later it cleared dude was dead along with his peers


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Voted For: Prodigy

ok,i guess trhis is a topical..right..this is a hard vote cause i don't kno the topic..but i'll vote for the better flowing verse n the more protrays more of an image...honestly i can't say i liked them as a whole some really good idea's n lines but they were downplayed but either the layout or a bad forced ryme scheme.....i think pro got this his verse was conbsistent with flow throughtout,even though your idea was played you kept on a single topic...nothing special but you got this win...
http://community.rapverse.com/showb...ad.php?t=139167
topical:200 posts
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=137724
me vs 650

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Uping some votes ~2~,,..

Voted For: Mc DeaTh

this goes to mcdeath cause for one the other dude didnt really talk about a friends rampage and overall just enjoyed mcdeath's story better. Was easier to follow

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Voted For: Mc DeaTh

ok.. both of yas came about the same creativity wise, but being compleatly honest, i found it a lot easier to follow deaths story. he also (appart from flames and became) never fell off in rhyming his bars.. prodigy did pretty well in rhymin bars aswell but it was really noticable near the end (forgive and sure)..

overall it was a fairly interesting battle to read, but im gonna have to go with MC DEATH simply because i understood his story a lot better.

Im looking to do some topicals by the way so if either of u wanna battle me topically then that would be cool.. PM me.

but first off i need votes on my battle.. its in my sig..
so return the favor..

peace.

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Voted For: Mc DeaTh

Both was good.....But I liked McDeaths better it was flow alone like a story....

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Voted For: Prodigy

Mc Death- Ok, Wasnt Very Discriptive, Straight To The Point, Wasnt Able To Invision It.....

Prodigy- Ok, Was A Bit More Discriptive In Actions And Enivroment, Easier to Invision Than Mc Deaths..

Both- Both Flowed Decent, And Were On Point With Topic, But I Felt Prod's Was More Discriptive And Easier To Imagine, So Thats Why He Gets My Vote..

Vote- Prod

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