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10-10-04, 01:18 AM | #1 | |||||
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fuck a white tee
IP: 6A1B 8FA6
u wearin a white tee jus say u a mark
then ima rob when the sky gets dark when i pull a lick me n my boys feast look at my gun this bitch is a beast its a big muhfucka wit 30 of his friends and all 30 will chase u down to ure end leave a nice big spot on yo white tee all cuz u wanted to b ballin g so i creep, then i crept sent these bullets strait fo the neck have yo ass sprayin blood like a super soaker u cant breath its like u got a choaker but not one of those gothic fuckin collars like the one u got cuz i wanted dem dollars
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for all these niggas that say i cant rap, nigga i dont rap any way, i ROBBBBB -crunchy blac(three 6 mafia) i get high like the birds and the planes, i get high when bullets hit faces after words are exchanged -styles p(the lox) u betta tell yo man wit the gauges im nice, i'll shoot up yo white shirts till yall look like dice -I 20 Quote:
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10-10-04, 02:55 AM | #2 | ||||
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IP: 8BC0 D952
dude man extend ur wordplay thats why you lost to YuNg_GuN...lol...
return da favor wit my new shit True Love...
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10-10-04, 03:56 AM | #3 | |||||
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IP: ABE5 5A5C
dude
you had like no vocab at all,ur lines word basic and weak...u need to work on your vocab,wordplay....and all man elevate goodluck
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10-10-04, 04:35 AM | #4 | ||||
That's Right...I'm White
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IP: 731E 07B0
Aight i'll start with the the bad points first..like everyone else said, you vocab needs to be upped, get more desriptive with your words, to give more of a feel to the rhyme.
same with wordplay work on that....sooner or later you get better at it. As for the good points, The flow was pretty persistant, pretty basic, but it stayed for the most part. Your structure wasn't to bad, a few line were a little stretched, but that's aight. Anywho keep droppin, the more you write the better you get Much Respect.... |
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10-10-04, 02:34 PM | #5 | |||||||
you gotta hear me again
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IP: 8983 E628
ok kinda simple i'm guessing it was a diss track? cause there that dude named white tee on here.i can see y you got to loses then lolol 2/10
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10-10-04, 05:37 PM | #6 | |||||
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IP: 6A1B 8FA6
1 noooo this isent a diss track and 2 i shoulda won that battle, and 3 it was jus a quick lil freeystyle, and 4 thanks i guess for the feedback, and for the 5th and final aka ure a bitch n thas the biz, peace
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for all these niggas that say i cant rap, nigga i dont rap any way, i ROBBBBB -crunchy blac(three 6 mafia) i get high like the birds and the planes, i get high when bullets hit faces after words are exchanged -styles p(the lox) u betta tell yo man wit the gauges im nice, i'll shoot up yo white shirts till yall look like dice -I 20 Quote:
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10-10-04, 08:12 PM | #7 | |||||
Banned: Cheating
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IP: 28AD 5545
A Sinn Wanna Battle Mayne I Need Somethin On My Record So Hit Me Bac Up
At Either My MSn> DaydrenDipset@wmconnect.com My emailz The same |
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11-01-04, 10:10 AM | #8 | ||||||
...Jea...
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IP: 0825 899A
dawg....you need to work on that vocab and, some of the lines seemed a little stretched.
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11-01-04, 10:13 AM | #9 | ||||||
...Jea...
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IP: 0825 899A
hey sinn i need some body to battle.....might that be u......if so, then set it up
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