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11-07-04, 04:44 PM | #1 | |||
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...A JouRney In MiNds...
IP: 58E6 C588
Now my heart has wandered out too far for me to walk it back
So I relied on my train of thought but it’s coming off its tracks The clocks are cracked so with time shattered I force ahead I feed my thirst only with tears but now that source is dead The smoke has spread; I squint like when awoke from bed I asked God to help me but in the reply fate spoke instead Provoked by death it lighted a path retracing back to the past So I sailed through my mistakes without the slack or a mast It happened too fast; reality struck me with a smack and a blast Emotion was dripping out a side of me like a crack in a glass Laughing at last, I relived ignorance chasing my reason around The changing seasons swinging my feelings like a playground But it’s too late now; my future has already grown grey and torn Because my decisive mistake came for me on the day I was born |
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11-07-04, 10:59 PM | #2 | |||
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IP: 58E6 C588
let me get sum feed back on this
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11-07-04, 11:47 PM | #3 | |||||
SEE YA AT THE TOP
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IP: 1EDC 673C
this was a cool peice wasnt all that other shit you hear on here so i give it a 8/10 get at mine yo
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11-08-04, 11:23 PM | #4 | |||
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IP: 58E6 C588
uuuuuuuuuuuuuppppppppppppppiiiiiiinnn............. .
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11-09-04, 02:32 AM | #5 | ||||
leave you rest'n pz's
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IP: C837 AA17
pretty good....7/10...you prolly be decent at topicals..
i liked the content...but flow fell off in areas...
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i'll play on ya consience, ya contents is complete nonsense
speak of biting, then you fucks flip everyone of my damn concepts what the fuck, was you high..? did you think i wouldn't recognize lines that i made then you come up some bullshit tryna prove that im gay...! . . fake fucks..move on...! |
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11-09-04, 01:04 PM | #6 | |||||||
***cITYSLICka***
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IP: D3BC 2245
Wuz A Good Piece All Around.good Topic,vocab,wordplay,flowed Well.9/10
Keep Em Comin'
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I'm like CHUCKy dyin' to live in the flesh free of the BATTERY, ASSAULT n ROBBERY rapidly,wishin' cupid would clap at me N lift this evil spell so I can experience happilly evil backwards-see(down there) EVIL............backwards =............LIVE |
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11-09-04, 01:09 PM | #7 | |||||
~SAINT SINNER~
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IP: ABE5 5A5C
sickness.
for being a new guy i think you ripped it. i especially liked your multies brotha...they hit the mark. good shit, i look forward to peepin' your work in the future. keep it up homie. oner. ...if you got the time, drop a response to my latest open mic (tighten the noose). its a quick keystyle for some broad named hangman. let me know what you think. .....s.v.
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QUESTION: Is it even possible to improve upon perfection??? ANSWER: CRHYME SINDICATE "I remember this one time I thought I was wrong........but I was mistaken." -Unknown R.I.P. Jonathan "ONE MAN BAND/TERUMOTO" Nigro. Goodbye brother. God bless the dead. One love. |
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11-09-04, 04:01 PM | #8 | |||
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IP: 46C3 56BC
nice verse hommie....
flow was good... creativenesss was good... topic was good... u focused on the topic which was good... all around tight... 8.5 outta 10 peep my collabo open mic its called * u knew it was gonna happen violent type collabo * |
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11-11-04, 09:21 PM | #9 | ||||||
...Jea...
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IP: 3240 794D
dawg...that was sum tight shit....9/10...keep it up mayne......P.I.N.K..........1
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