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11-03-04, 03:59 PM
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i write(unfinished)
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first time doin these let me know whut ya think---
I write these lyrics 2 release whuts on my mind/ one line at a time, voicin my heart threw a rhyme/ express my emotions my feelins, whutever lurks inside/all tha pain & fears my soul trys 2 hide/ And i ride my trials out with tha swift stroke of my pen/ All my victorys along with all of my sin/ And time again this paper is attacked by my ink/ as i sink 2 where only my heart can think/ on tha brink of destruction yet so close to hope/ its hard to cope on tha last thread of this rope........  |
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11-03-04, 04:09 PM
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IP:
any..........1??? A- either every1 is so blown away by my skill and cant pull them selves 2gether to post a reply or B- it sucked so bad no one wants to waste there time saying how horrible it was
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11-03-04, 04:10 PM
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IP:
i leaning 2wards tha latter one ............
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11-04-04, 02:08 PM
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IP:
feedback any1???????????
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11-04-04, 02:19 PM
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...Jea...
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IP:
yo...i liked it alot...8/10.....i would definitely like to see da finished version....you gon be real good, real soon.....just elevate a little and youll be great.
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11-04-04, 02:37 PM
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IP:
hey man thanks, didnt think i'd get any feedback. but thanks 4 da words.
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11-04-04, 02:41 PM
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...Jea...
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no prob mayne................!!!!!!!$$$$$$$$$$$?????//
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11-04-04, 02:42 PM
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IP:
good shit...like East said id like to c it finished maybe it would b much betta...not dat da unfinished wasnt good cause it was...newayz good piece all out...8/10
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11-04-04, 02:46 PM
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IP:
thanks man, yeah probaly finish it soon. was in one of those moods and startin to write it, jus hard to get in tha...state of mind when i was writtin. but thanks for tha lines
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11-04-04, 02:57 PM
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***cITYSLICka***
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i read ur piece before but didn't have time to drop no feed.my apologies for dat.
you got skillz and no it didn't suck.9/10.feelin the structure and it flowed real good.keep em' comin' and don't get discouraged by no feedbak.stay up.
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  I'm like CHUCKy dyin' to live in the flesh free of the BATTERY, ASSAULT n ROBBERY rapidly,wishin' cupid would clap at me N lift this evil spell so I can experience happilly evil backwards-see(down there) EVIL............backwards =............LIVE |
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11-04-04, 02:59 PM
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IP:
........thanks bro........
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