So pay attention as i display wordplay on these cowards,
crack ya bones outward, give you a shock like usin toasters in showers,
who feels my power?duplicate of a legend eatin pussies speech up so watch your words get devoured,
inside ya minds, like i commited a mental crime,make ya hearts sublime,
pace myself, so "watch" Men~Iz throw ya body into "clocks" just to show you a waste a "time",
killin herbs, destroyin ya wordz, your verse has beenn corrupted,
cuz my shits blazin like Mt.Vesuvius just erupted,

second drop....im jus tryna elevate my skill....feedback peeplez

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not bad...
flow was decent..
word-play was ok..

So pay attention as i display wordplay on these cowards,
crack ya bones outward, give you a shock like usin toasters in showers
that was preety good...

u battle???

if so holla at me throu PM i might have a offer for u....

VIOLENT TYPE...

thanks for the feedback


uppin peepz.................

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this was kew...it was jus a lil choppy...but, you definately got tha jist of textin...good use of vocab, wordplay, multis, and metas....i see "legend" potentenial...i was feeling that tha opening...keep it up and elevate yo...

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.Re-Writing The Re-Run.

thanks homie.....more feedback peoples

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Thought this was good......Didnt seem to be choppy to me....

"So pay attention as i display wordplay on these cowards,
crack ya bones outward, give you a shock like usin toasters in showers,"
Good verses.....

You had nice metas and great vocab, some good wordplay....short but sweet keep it up

thanx may'n......more feedback peoples..............

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Good open mic....Topic was good too....Your vocab....and wordplay .....were very good....good open mic for a newb...or you mite just be a talented newb anyways 8/10 on this ....keep up tha good work peace......

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thanks for the feedback fury.....need more peepz......

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tight drop man....it was a lil stretched but i dont think that matters when its packed with multi's and shit....cuz its how i write......flowed great...you sure ur really a newb cuz if so where u been sleepin you def got talent man....bery good multi's and vocab was good wordplay was good too...keep it up man..peace~1

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thanks ryda.....more feedback peoplez..............................

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it was good 8.5/10....part1?.....is u gonna make a part 2or sumthin.....if so then im looking froward to reading it..........1